User talk:Kosaskih
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[edit]Hello, Kosaskih, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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[edit]Hi, Kosaskih -- welcome to Wikipedia! As Ian mentioned, the Teahouse is a great resource for new editors. But did you know that Wikipedia also has an extensive help library for common questions? Of course, if you run into a question or problem, you're always welcome to get in touch with me either by email or on my talk page. Happy editing! Fraudoktorkatie (talk) 14:33, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
Selecting articles for the Wikipedia project
[edit]Article choice for IAH209 SS16 is Deathbed confession Kosaskih (talk) 16:02, 22 February 2016 (UTC)
Editing Deathbed Confession
[edit]Hi Hannah,
I think you picked a very intriguing topic for your Wikipedia Project. Reading through your lead section and your body paragraphs you seem to do a great job in keeping a neutral point of view throughout. For your lead section you define your topic very well in the first couple sentences. Reading your lead section you discuss many topics like crimes, religion, emotions, and media. These are a lot of different topics to discuss for this project. Were you planning on touching on each of these topics for your final draft? It might be too much work on your part if you do. Maybe instead try to in depth explore a few topics like you did for religion, which I found very informative and interesting. You created a great start to the legality subheading you could possibly try to intertwine crime into that section if it makes sense in the research that you find. Also, in your lead section for the final draft make sure to link certain words, like confession to an article, so that a reader doing research can further expand their knowledge on subtopics in order to really understand your article on deathbed confessions. Make sure too that the order you discuss your subheading topics in the lead section match the way you organize them throughout your article. For example, you first bring up the topic of crime in your lead section, but the first subheading talked about in the body of your article is religion. In the body paragraphs of your essay possibly try to find facts or statistics on what are common things people confess or regret on their deathbed. I think that would be interesting to discuss in your article and to research about. I think for the religion portion of your editing process you did a great job exploring each religion and explaining their way of viewing death and the afterlife. Try to expand a little more on each of those sections by explaining who is at there deathbed (family members, friends, etc.), what process or rituals are performed while they are on their deathbed or once they have already pasted. If you want to expand on the crime or legality section try to find if anyone in the past or in history has confessed on their deathbed to a crime they or a friend committed and how the legal regulations played out because of this confession. For your media section if you choose to edit and expand this section you could bring up movies that include a deathbed confession in them and how it was pivotal to the plot. Overall, for your body paragraphs make sure to link words to articles in order to allow the readers the opportunity to explore related topics. Also, try to add more research to your article and make sure to ref tag it. I saw in your journal post that you were having trouble finding reliable useful sources. What helped me during my research process was using the MSU library search engine and the Google scholar search engine. I don’t know if you have already tried this but it helps changing up the word you are searching, so if you were looking up more information on the Catholic religion search “catholic confession, forgiveness of sins, etc.” Overall, I love your topic I found it very interesting learning how different religions think about death and the processes of approaching it. I think you have a great start to your Wikipedia Project and I hope my peer review and ideas helped. Good luck on the rest of your editing and if you have any questions you can email me!
LindseyRenk (talk) 19:39, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review for Deathbed Confessions
[edit]I like that you discuss different practices and perspectives of what one should do regarding their last moments. I think this is a good way of expanding the concept of deathbed confessions and what it looks like for different types of people. I think the article could be expanded by possibly including deathbed practices/confessions for different groups (i.e.- tribal, ethnic,etc) to step out of the religious aspect. I feel this would boost the quality of the article because it would give a wider view of the concept of deathbed confessions. Also, I think if you didn't already define, discuss, or expand on deathbed confessions so readers can understand what it is in a more “technical” way. I think the most important thing that could be done is to just add deathbed confession practices and such by discussing practices outside of religion. I like how you keep each section concise, but there is still a great deal of information.