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Veiqia

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I've listed this article for peer review because it was recently promoted to GA status and it was suggested to me that could be a Featured Article candidate. I've not participated in the FA process before, but would be interested to hear feedback on whether this could be an FA candidate.

Thanks, Lajmmoore (talk) 16:23, 16 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Airship

A very interesting article. As requested, I will provide comments from an FAC standpoint below:

Non-English-language terms should not be simply italicised, but put inside the relevant {{lang}} template (MOS:FORITA), possibly with an English-language gloss if needed. This is very important to increase accessibility—see MOS:OTHERLANG for the details on why.

Be careful that you clearly outline the timeline in the lead—that a once prominent practice was discouraged during the nineteenth century and later disappeared, but has now revived in the twenty-first century. Otherwise you end up saying that "the last daubati was active between 1908 and 1910" and that a 21st century daubatai has tattoed several women. Both can't be true at the same time.

The prose is alright, but could perhaps use a trip to WP:GOCE. There are a fair few errors, I noticed: "Veiqia can cultural impact outside Fiji", "Another example is Theodor Kleinschmidt who many several drawings of veiqia", "Indeed, veiqia were a soure of pride for women", "whether at pubsecence"

The number of illustrations are really good—would be a really nice FA with this level of illustrative detail.

Sometimes the prose gets a bit lost in itself. Take "As anthropologist Karen Jacobs has observed "the tattooed body is hard to collect"." this is somewhat oddly placed, coming just after the statement that records began to be collected, and the "as" at the beginning indicates a sort of logical statement that doesn't really follow. Incidents such as "Ema Tavola also designed a tattoo for Margaret Aull to mark the death of her grandmother" are a little too trivia-like.

Otherwise, I think the article strikes a really good balance between WP:MTAU and giving lots of detail—what FA criterion 2b) demands.

Nice work. If you have any questions, feel free to ping me. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:59, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much for the review AirshipJungleman29 - these points are all really helpful. I've started with the lang links - but should I add veiqia as a lang link throughout? Or not because it's the topic of the page? Many thanks Lajmmoore (talk) 11:47, 9 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- I believe you could go either way with that. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:29, 10 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Note to self - continue with copy editing and checking prose Lajmmoore (talk) 12:30, 9 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Note, copy editing and prose checking done (by me at least) Lajmmoore (talk) 11:13, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much AirshipJungleman29, for the next step I took a look at the FAC guidence and it suggested to look for a mentor, would you be willing and have capacity? If not, I really appreciate the help so far! Lajmmoore (talk) 11:34, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, I'd be willing. I'd have to take a look at the sources first (first-timers at FAC have to pass a rigorous source spot-check) but after I do that I'll provide comments below. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:43, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much, please ping me if you need access to anything I used Lajmmoore (talk) 11:58, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]