Talk:Terry A. Davis/GA1

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Nominator: OpalYosutebito (talk · contribs) 14:46, 23 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rjjiii (talk · contribs) 01:36, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I'm going to start reviewing this soon. I'll check sources first. Let me know if there is anything specifically that you'd like feedback on, Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 01:36, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

2a: There are pseudo headings for "Notes" and "Citations". The easiest fix would be making them into real headings, but you only have one footnote under "Notes". I think the article would flow better if that footnote was worked into the actual body text. This would also fix the pseudo headings by getting rid of the separate sections, Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 01:43, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Checking sources

2b, (footnote numbers as of 17 January 2025):

fn2 Hadn't heard of the source before but they seem legit and have editorial oversight so they should pass WP:RS.
- fn2a: I don't see this in the source. I see one person express similar sentiments. Also, depending on how one reads support, the source says something nearly the opposite. It talks about his fans attempting to support him when he was homeless, but Terry refuses them.
- fn2b: This verifies everything but his parents living in Las Vegas.
- fn2k: Verified, no OR, no CLOP
fn3
- fn3m: The language is too similar to the source (WP:CLOP). "sought to emulate Jesus by giving away all his possessions" is very similar to "sought to emulate Jesus by giving away all his belongings" The rest is fine and the quote is correctly attributed.
- fn3n: The language is too similar to the source (WP:CLOP). "Dremel tool nearly set his apartment on fire, he abandoned the idea." is very similar to "Dremel tool nearly set his apartment on fire, which caused him to abandon the idea." The facts are fine, just reword it.
- fn3o: This has the Las Vegas bit from fn2b above. Looks good.
- fn3p: I don't know the best way to phrase this, but as the source was written in 2014, it can only comment on the period between 2003 and 2014.
fn4 I checked this because of the "blog" in the URL, but James Sanders is a staff writer doing a column, so this should meet WP:V. Either switch to a working URL or remove "| url-status = live" so that it links to the archived version. Footnote 8 is the same footnote, you could reuse this named reference here (this suggestion is not required for GA, just feedback).
- fn4a: I don't see "as a programmer" just that he worked on VAX machines. Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 02:39, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- fn4b: Verified, no OR, no CLOP. What an odd piece of software, Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 02:39, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- fn4c: Verified, no OR, no CLOP. I think the quote's purpose would be more clear if you added |source="After Egypt" but that's not required.
fn8: Verified, is the spelling in TempleOS "Holy C" or "HolyC" without the space?
fn9: The citation should probably list Terry Davis as the author, they are just reprinting a quote from him, right?
fn14f Verified.
fn17 Verified. Not required for GA, but consider unlinking wiktionary. It seems to say no more than what's already in this article.

There are some small issues here, but nothing major, let me know when you've gone through them Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 02:39, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Checking images

He released his operating system to the public domain and at some point released everything on his operating system's website to the public domain.[1] The photos of him are all correctly tagged photos from his site. They're all appropriate. All but one caption looks good:

Try something more direct instead of this caption, "Davis with a computer monitor, c. mid-1980s". "Davis in the 1980s" would be enough.

Alt text isn't required for GA, but I'd suggest adding it at leat for File:VirtualBox TempleOS x64 27 02 2021 20 43 48.png. When there is no alt text, a screen reader will read aloud the file name which in this case is just a string of numbers. Rjjⁱⁱⁱ (talk) 02:49, 22 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]