Talk:Frank Fitzgerald (American football)

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A fact from Frank Fitzgerald (American football) appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 21 March 2024 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Frank Fitzgerald was the general manager of an NFL team that played under four names in five years?

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 15:40, 16 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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... that Frank Fitzgerald was the general manager of an NFL team that played under four names in five years? Source: explained in the article - Boston Yanks in 1948, New York Bulldogs 1949, New York Yanks 1950-51, Dallas Texans 1952
- ALT1: ... that after working for the NFL team known as the Boston Yanks / New York Bulldogs / Yanks / Dallas Texans, Frank Fitzgerald worked for the Houston / Tennessee Oilers / Titans? Source: explained in the article
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Keith "End Zone" Jones
- Comment: I think its interesting that his teams went under so many different name changes, and that the only two teams he was with happened to have some of the most name changes (not sure if there's any similar comparison except perhaps the 1920s Buffalo and Detroit NFL teams).

Moved to mainspace by BeanieFan11 (talk). Self-nominated at 18:12, 23 February 2024 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Frank Fitzgerald (American football); consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

Article is new enough, long enough, and neutral in tone. Earwig came up nil, and a spot check showed no issues. Hooks are interesting and sourced. My preference is for ALT0, though I think it would be clearer if worded "that played under four names" or "that went by four names", with my preference being the former. @BeanieFan11: what do you think about this suggestion? Also, your pending QPQ will need to be done before this can be marked good to go. Thanks! DrOrinScrivello (talk) 20:46, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @DrOrinScrivello: Added QPQ. Changed the hook to your suggestion. BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:56, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  - Everything looks good to me. DrOrinScrivello (talk) 22:10, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

Passed. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:14, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 19:16, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Added GM cat.
Added WW2 cat.
"was an American football executive" should we change that to "was an American professional football executive"
Lowercase draft in the lead and body I guess.
- Boo! BeanieFan11 (talk) 22:47, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"later renamed to the Tennessee Titans". Change to "now known as the Tennessee Titans" so as not to repeat "later" twice in one sentence.
"That year, the team compiled a record of 3–9" Change the team to "the Yanks". "the team" was getting a little repetitive.
"executive with the Houston Oilers (later Tennessee Oilers / Titans" Change to "now known as the Tennessee Titans".
"the person who announced the team's NFL Draft selections to league officials" That makes it sound like he was on TV or something. I don't think he was though? Suggest changing to "gave the team's NFL draft selections to league officials" That part in the lead might need revising also to make it less confusing.

I think that's everything. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 19:54, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Addressed almost everything. Any idea of a good way to reword the draft part in the lead? BeanieFan11 (talk) 22:47, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I can't really think of anything, maybe we need to invent a new word... ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 22:55, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe something like, "He later worked in the radio business and for the NFL draft department of the Houston Oilers, now known as the Tennessee Titans"? BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:01, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That's perfect. Nice. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:04, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Changed the wording. I think I've addressed everything now. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:08, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, that's everything. Passing the article. Nice work. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:13, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.