Talk:James Alexander Ulio/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 18:39, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:54, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 08:54, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments as follows:

Lead

Suggest treating the Pancho Villa Expedition as separate to World War I
Y Moved the sentence about the Pancho Villa Expedition to the previous section. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Early

The infobox says he served in the Philippine–American War, but in this section his service in the Philippines was a few years afterwards
Y The text says he "served in the Philippines from 1906 to 1908"; the Philippine–American War went from 1899 to 1911. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

World War I

Suggest putting the link for (see American entry into World War I) onto the text "...United States entered World War I..."
Y Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"In March 1918, he..." no need to recite year, already established it is 1918. Same applies to the usage of 1918 in following sentences. Similarly the second usage of 1917 in the previous sentence
Y deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
After the Armistice was signed in November 1918,...: seems repetitive since the Armistice has already been mentioned
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Between the wars

After graduation, Ulio was again assigned to the Office of the Adjutant General of the Army from 1931 to 1935.: seems to me the date range should be to 1932, given the way the next paragraph starts
Y The year 1931 is correct, as he graduated in June 1931. Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Following his promotion to colonel on 1 August 1935, he became chief of staff of the Hawaiian Department.: this seems inconsistent with what is stated in the previous sentence unless he was concurrently on the service command section
Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Some of the years recited in the last paragraph of this section are redundant
Y Deleted one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

World War II

Later life

Does the bronze oak leaf cluster constitute a second award of the DSM? The infobox says two were awarded?
Yes, it does. The New Zealand equivalent would be a medal bar. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

The sources themselves seem reliable for what they are used for
Spot checks done for cites 11 (both instances) and 35 and both are OK
I get 404 errors when attempting to access the pdf sources.
Y The Center of Military History has been moving stuff around, and you now need "www.history.army.mil" instead of "www.history.army.mil". Updated the links. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that. More source checks: cites 17, 18, 24, 25, 30 all OK. Zawed (talk) 09:01, 9 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

Image tags used appropriate
Dupe links: first lieutenant, captain, major, 'Fort Leavenworth, Kansas'
Y Removed the dups. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:49, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That's it for me. Apologies for the delay in coming back to this, other projects and time got away on me. Zawed (talk) 09:15, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Happy with this one, and am passing as GA as I believe it meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:05, 9 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]