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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Opening statement

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In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed, plus Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or minus Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Review of this absolute unit will begin once I have slept :). —♠Vami_IV†♠ 09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Epicgenius: While you're active, we're not quite done here yet. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 16:25, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Major office tenants include or will include fashion company Tapestry, consulting firm BCG, and Alphabet subsidiary Sidewalk Labs. Can you elaborate, for consistency, what these last two companies are/do?

Site and structures

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The interactive map is a nice touch that I think I'll be emulating in the future. Must have been a pain to put together, though. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 13:54, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Could you expand on the two sentences under the section header with a general description of the development and its contents, present and future?
    •  Done
  • and was the first structure in Hudson Yards structure to be occupied by tenants The second "structure" is redundant.
  • It is designed by Kohn Pedersen Fox Past-tense, please.
    •  Done
  • above ground level and be level with the High Line. to be level?
    •  Fixed
  • Bank of China, Deutsche Bank, Wells Fargo Wikilink these.
    •  Done
  • Another law firm, Milbank, Tweed, Hadley & McCloy, would occupy 250,000 square feet Would or will occupy that space?
  • blowing 45 miles per hour (72 km/h) air Re-order this.
    •  Done
  • 60,000-US-gallon (230,000 l; 50,000 imp gal) rainwater storage tank. Ah, for the runoff water, right?

Neighboring projects

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  • I question the need for this section. After all, it's not about the Hudson Yards. I suggest condensing and moving this section to "site and structures" with a description of the general location.

History

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  • which would have risen 1,750 feet, Put in a Template:Convert here for our Metric-using friends.
    •  Done
  • In June 2005, Sheldon Silver voted against the stadium, definitively eliminating the possibility of support at the state level and the possibility of the stadium's construction. Sorry, who, and why are they important?
  • master plan known as "Hudson Place" and "Hudson Green" When did this property become known as Hudson Yards?
  • After pilings for the Shed adjacent to 15 Hudson Yards were completed, construction on the Shed began in mid-2015. This can be shortened; see: "After its pilings were completed, construction on The Shed began in mid-2015 adjacent to 15 Hudson Yards."

Financing and ownership

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  • While a New York Times article Replace with "The New York Times".
    •  Done
  • described the $6 billion as "tax breaks", Wouldn't this be a tax break? And if it's not a tax break, it kind of undermines that narrative to describe the package as $6 billion in investments and tax breaks.

Tenants

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  • and Alphabet subsidiary Axe.
    •  Done
  • Repeated citations here: and Facebook once it opens.[35][36] 50 Hudson Yards would also be occupied by Facebook.[35][36]
    •  Done

Design

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  • Citation [187] is repeated without interruption in the first paragraph.
    • minus Removed

GA progress

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Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.