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Nominator: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:30, 2 January 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 15:21, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
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- "where he became one of its flight commanders." A sentence on the role and responsibilities of a flight commander would be helpful.
- Have rephrased slightly and linked to Flight (military unit). Zawed (talk) 10:21, 11 January 2025 (UTC)
- "engaged in convoy patrols". Which involved what?
- Reworded this for clarification. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- Nice. "mostly carried out protective patrols over shipping convoys". Maybe 'mostly carried out patrols over shipping convoys' to really nail it down?
- Reworded as suggested. Zawed (talk) 09:59, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
- Nice. "mostly carried out protective patrols over shipping convoys". Maybe 'mostly carried out patrols over shipping convoys' to really nail it down?
- "the period late May to early June 1940. He briefly commanded the squadron during this time and was awarded the Distinguished Flying Cross." This suggests that his DFC was awarded during the period late May to early June, which it wasn't.
- Reworded. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- "flying as part of No. 12 Group's Duxford Wing." I think a brief explanation of the area covered by 12 Group and what a wing was would help.
- Added link for Wing and a brief explanation. Zawed (talk) 10:21, 11 January 2025 (UTC)
- "No. 12 Group's Duxford Wing. The unit's commander. Perhaps replace "unit" with 'squadron' for clarity?
- I originally worded it that way to avoid the close usage of squadron in the same sentence, but see now it could potentially be interpreted as referring to the Duxford Wing. Zawed (talk) 09:30, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- "Squadron Leader P. Pinkham". Is his full first name not known?
- Added. Zawed (talk) 09:30, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- Could 'German-occupied' be inserted somewhere in the first sentence of "Later war service"?
- Done. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
"He initially served at the Air Headquarters Western Desert but in February 1942 was moved to the RAF's Middle East Command." Is the actual location at which he served known for either of these?
- The specific sources used for Lane don't specify this, and I haven't been able to pin down the physical location of these HQs in other potential sources I checked. Zawed (talk) 09:59, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
- "Lane, his rank as squadron leader being made substantive by this time, returned to England in June to take up command of No. 61 Operational Training Unit at Montford Bridge for several months." Could the rank bit be put into a separate sentence.
- Done. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- "his rank as squadron leader being made substantive by this time". Could "substantive" be replaced with a word or phrase which would be understandable to a none expert?
- Changed the terminology here. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- Lead: "He was on staff duties for a year from mid-1941 during which time he wrote Spitfire!"; main article: "Lane was the author of Spitfire!, written during his period of service at No. 12 Group". Which?
- Clarified in the main portion that it was written while he was a staff officer at No. 12 Group. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- What, if any, is the distinction between "shot down" and "destroyed" in the article?
- I use these terms interchangeably to avoid repetitive language when referring to the dates/types/locations of Lane's aerial victories. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- I thought you might be. I think there is a problem about describing an aircraft as "destroyed" if it is not known if it was. (Eg exploded, fell apart in the air, hit the ground at speed.) "Shot down" seems a more useful general descriptor.
- I have revised to use "shot down" more. Zawed (talk) 09:59, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
- I thought you might be. I think there is a problem about describing an aircraft as "destroyed" if it is not known if it was. (Eg exploded, fell apart in the air, hit the ground at speed.) "Shot down" seems a more useful general descriptor.
- Could you email me pages 386–387 of Aces High, thanks.
- Email sent earlier this week. Zawed (talk) 09:59, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
That's it from me. A cracking little article. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:30, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
I am just waiting for your response to my first comment, before starting to go through all of your responses. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:34, 10 January 2025 (UTC) Two come backs above and one comment you missed. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:43, 11 January 2025 (UTC)
- @Gog the Mild: thanks for looking at this, I have finished this off and dealt with all of the comments now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:59, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
- Also, I discovered that his promotion history was not clear, so have made some clarifying edits around this. Zawed (talk) 10:03, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
- Unsurprisingly the spot checks are fine. Nice work. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:12, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
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