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List of Comprehensive Nuclear-Test-Ban Treaty signatories

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like some feedback on the prose in the lead section of the article as well suggestions on the structure of the table:. The Rambling Man provided me with some suggestions, and I now believe it satisfies at least the basic standards of a good list article, and am hoping to eventually make this a Featured List article.

Thanks in advance for all your help, Allstar86 (talk) 08:31, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

Anything in the lead which is not repeated or referenced later in a list needs to have a ref / cite. I would add cite(s) for the whole second paragraph of the lead. I would also make sure the "To date" in that paragraph is replaced by July 2008 or whatever the date of the most recent update is.
- Done Added cites to second paragraph, and replaced 'to date' with 'July 2008' --Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The "Not Annex 2" in the first small table is confusing. It also took me two read-throughs to understand what Annex 2 is - any chance this can be made clearer (might also be my denseness / the late hour).
- Partially Done I'm not sure of a better way to describe states that aren't Annex 2, though I suppose "Annex 1 only" is another option, but also a bit cumbersome. I added the word 'states' to emphasize what these numbers referred to, and also used bullets to mark a clear differentiation to explain the difference between the states.--Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Current refs 4 and 5 need a publisher
- Done United Nations is the quasi-publisher in this case, so I added that. --Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The first paragraph of the lead is just one sentence - could it be combined with the second paragraph? Generally one sentence paragraphs should be avoided.
- Done merged second paragraph with first. --Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:44, 17 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for all the comments! --Allstar86 (talk) 00:17, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]