Wikipedia:Peer review/A.F.C. Wimbledon/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because i would like to see how high it could get on the quality scale.
Thanks,
Sunderland06 18:02, 12 September 2007 (UTC) My comments
done please refer to football clubs as either 'it' or 'they' and stick to the same throughout
- actually what you've done isn't what I meant, having the name of the club sometimes is good. I was refering to statements like 'The club places great emphasis on its role' & 'The Dons' success in 2004-05 was not limited to their senior side'. There are lots more. You can either refer to the club as a single entity 'it' or as a collection of people 'they' but if you keep flitting between the 2 it gets confusing. JMiall₰ 23:37, 14 September 2007 (UTC)
done 'agreed to allow the owners of their club to relocate' - could this just say 'agreed to allow Wimbledon FC to relocate'? at present it is slightly confusing
cited done 'their traditional local support dried up almost immediately in a ground-swell of popular protest against the move.' - this is potentially POV and so needs a citation. There are other statements like this, some work definitely needs doing on improving the referencing
done 'leaving AFC Wimbledon as the sole bearer of the "Wimbledon" name' - what about AFC Wimbledon Ladies?
done 'the ground they shared with Kingstonian' - 'share'?
- sort out minor typos
deleted pre honours done why are the Wimbledon FC honours in the article? Those honours do not belong to AFC Wimbledon, they are not the same club, they are a new club with many of the same supporters from the same area. JMiall₰ 22:38, 14 September 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 00:21, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
- In a similar vein, the multiple dates of foundation need to be removed, AFC Wimbledon have no legal claim to having been founded in 1889 ChrisTheDude 12:41, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
- A lot of work needed on the manual of style, e.g. WP:DASH should be visited for advice on how to use the en-dash for scores, year ranges etc. See also WP:HEAD - for section headings.
done I don't like the season-by-season break-down - look at other club articles for guidance (e.g. Arsenal F.C., Norwich City F.C.) and base you article on those, even for GA.
- See WP:CITE for where to put citations, and try to use {{Cite web}} which provides an easy template with free, consistent formatting of data for each citation.
done replaced with relatively "...astonishingly ..." - avoid Point of View terms.
done "Enfield Town 2-1]];[14] " - copyedit required, stray pair of brackets.
- A heading like "Why "AFC?"" isn't appropriate - it'd be better to add that information into a History section or similar.
done Why are some players red linked? Are they any more significant than those that aren't? If not, remove linkage.
- Club records need to be written as prose and cited.
done Scrap 90% of the external links per WP:EL.
Hope they help. The Rambling Man 11:54, 3 October 2007 (UTC)