Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/1993 College Baseball All-America Team/archive1

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The list was promoted by Dabomb87 17:38, 11 October 2010 [1].

1993 College Baseball All-America Team

Featured list candidates/1993 College Baseball All-America Team/archive1

Nominator(s): TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:49, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because it is similar in format to the 1991 FL and 1992 ~~FLC that seems to be about to be~~ FL that was just promoted. TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:49, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment—no dab links, no dead external links. Ucucha 14:16, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Support ~~Oppose~~. 'Accomplishments' section is written rather chaotically. The first paragraph says that a few players were selected by all three selectors and lists some of their other achievements. The second paragraph lists all players selected by all three selectors thus repeating information from the first paragraph. The third paragraph lists some other achievements of the selected players including players already mentioned in the first paragraph. I think that the entire section should rewritten. It should begin with the second paragraph. The first paragraph should be merged with the third (with information duplicating the second paragraph removed) and put after the second. The section should be written in an orderly fashion without jumping back and forth from one player to another (and back to the first). Ruslik_Zero 15:03, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the feedback. I think I made some changes to the 1992 list that I mirrored with this list. I have to go back and look at what I have done to all three. My internet access is a bit limited for the next few days because I am traveling on family matters.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:31, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - I have done some rearranging. I don't think merging the college accomplishment section with the pro section would be right.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:21, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Kieschnick was named player of the year by all three selectors. This sentence still repeats the first paragraph. Ruslik_Zero 18:21, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      - Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:33, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        This was just an example. Varitek was honored by all three selectors ... also repeats the first paragraph. Also what 'in' is doing in the following sentence? putouts in during the 2002 Major League Baseball season. The second section actually needs a copy-edit by an editor who is not its auhtor. Ruslik_Zero 18:25, 28 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        Varitek is not redundant because it says he was also honored by all three in other years. I will add the word also for clarity.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:52, 28 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 22:04, 5 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

Spell out NAIA.
- I missed these somehow. Sorry for the late response.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:11, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Accomplishments: How many would "X Olympians" be?
- removed. I don't see any in this class.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:33, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Varitek's full name isn't given on first use; perhaps this is a result of earlier edits.
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:17, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
De-capitalize "Champion" in "World Series Champion"?
- O.K. but left 2001 World Series Championship team--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:17, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"he led national league catchers in putouts". Two words need capitalizing here.
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:20, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Add "the" in "with fewest bases on balls per 9 innings"?
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:24, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Inaugural" should also be de-capitalized.
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:24, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Spell out NCAA in the general reference and ref 6. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 20:14, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- O.K. (here and 91 & 92)--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:30, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Support – Meets FL standards. I was waiting to see what would become of Ruslik's opposition, which is no longer active. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 23:04, 7 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: "The 1993 All-American class featured 3 Major League Baseball All-Stars, one Major League Baseball record holder and 3 World Series champions. As of 2010[update] Jason Varitek remained active. A total of 8 players were selected by all three NCAA-sanctioned selectors:" numbers under ten are written out. Only issue I found. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:05, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:19, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Support. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:04, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all looks good to me. Harrias ^talk 22:30, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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