User talk:Magerber

Feedback by Julia Schaad

I like the job you did on the entry on Quassia amara, an interesting plant. The links are well done and work. In the following you find some improvement suggestions mostly on language. The biggest weakness, I would say, lies in the fragmentariness of the Cultivation section.

In the introduction:

with some botanists treating it as the sole species

I would replace treating with considering and sole with only

It is a shrub or rarely a small tree, (rarely 8 m), native to

Q. amara is mostly a shrub growing to 3 m tall, but it can in rare cases grow as a small tree up to 8 m high

Rephrase the section Ingredients:

In the wood a share of 0.09 to 0.17% of quassin and 0.05 to 0.11% of neoquassin was detected in Costa Rician plants.[1] Quassin is one of of the most bitter substances found in nature.

to The substance giving the plant its name is Quassin, one of of the most bitter substances found in nature. A share of 0.09 to 0.17% of quassin and 0.05 to 0.11% of neoquassin was detected in the wood of Costa Rician plants.[1]

I would call the next section Uses or Uses and Applications

‘Its use’ in the second sentence of this section doesn’t work as it refers to a plural. You could rephrase for example like this: Extracts of Quassia wood or bark can act as a natural insecticide, of which the use is particularly interesting for organic farming.

I like your Formulation section as it is very precise. I would rephrase as follows however, as there is an imperative used only in the second sentence: It is then diluted with 10 to 20 liters of water and used as a spray. The last phrase of this section is a bit unclear: 3-4.5kg wood or extracts or solution? And I would introduce this sentence like this: On apple trees, for instance, approximately 3-4.5 kg ?? per hectare seems to effectively control damage.

In the section Medicine: My suggestion for the first sentence: Traditionaly Q. amara is used as a digestive, to treat fever, hair parasites (lice, fleas), and Mosquito ..

Section: Other uses Extracts of Q. amara wood or bark are also used to flavor soft drinks, aperitifs and bitters which can be added to cocktails and or to baked goods.[9] [10]

The cultivation section is very short and could be enhanced by for example the following factors (taken from your literature source 12 e.g) -growing conditions regarding temperatures, soil requirements, or other growing conditions - Reproduction structures -how and where is it grown so far -where can it possibly be grown .. Schaadj (talk) 16:01, 20 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Anna Beerli:

Dear Magerber I really like your entry on Quassia amara. - You restructured the existing Wikipedia entry on Q.a. very well - The application part is really interesting

I will point out some recommendations to improve it section-wise:

Introduction - Q.a. is used… as additive in the food industry,

Morphology and Origin - I would split this section as the morphology treats more scientific aspects (biological and physiological characteristics) whereas origin can be seen as general information, thus being part of the introduction.

Ingredients: I'm not sure whether this is the correct title for this subsection (rather components than ingredient which is used for cooking recipes).

Applications Insecticide: - A good protection … replace by: It exhibits good protection, or could be shown… (either present or past indirect verb forms) - In Switzerland, a licensed formulation is available for organic farming.

Formulation: - Indicate in the title what this formulation can be used for

Medicine: - …used as digestive help or to treat fecer, hair parasites and Mosquito …

Cultivation: - This section is a bit brief, but within the frame of this task I guess it’s sufficient. Maybe you could work some more on this part. Or at least rephrase your sentences by indicating the agricultural context: “Regarding climatic requirements, Q.amara is susceptible towards frost blabla….”

Feedback by Valentin Theubet

Addition of a table of contents is good.

Morphology and origin
The chapter morphology and origin is good. Maybe you start with the morphology and bring the infos about the origin at the end of the paragraph. So if somebody is specially looking for the origin, it will eventually be easier to find.

Ingredients
The titel “Ingredients” is a bit confusing because the first meaning of this word is « something that enters as an element into a mixture: Flour, eggs, and sugar are the main ingredients in the cake »( http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/ingredient?s=t). But in fact you describe the chemical composition of the plant so I would simply use « Chemical composition » for example.

Applications
Actually I have a similar proposition for the title of the next chapter. In this case, the combination Applications as title and Insecticide as subtitle could lead the reader to think application of insecticide in Quassia amara crop. In most of the wikipage about crops the aspects you described in the chapter « Applications » are frequently labelled with « Uses ».

Insecticide
My english isn’t so good but I have the feeling that In would be better than For at the beginning of the sentence: « For Switzerland there is a licensed formulation available for organic farming. »

Medicine
Traditionally needs double “l” at the end. I would tell more about inhibition of Plasmodium yoelii yoelii and Plasmodium falciparum. What does that mean ?

Cultivation
There is unfortunatelly few info about the cultivation but I guess it is due to the lack of literature for this plant.

In general
You did a very good job and the article is much more attractive now. The structure is good and the information are short and well presented what is adapted to a wikipedia page.

Vtheubet (talk) 00:13, 21 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Dear magerber. Till when are you updating? We are three students from ETHZ and we will add more content to the Q. amaea page till tomorrow. See: http://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/User:Moixaur%C3%A9/sandbox and http://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/User:Staeheca/sandbox and http://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/User:Frenzy321/sandbox for our content. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Staeheca (talk • contribs) 03:29, 1 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]