User:Dr vulpes/Clipperton Island PR
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to submit this article WP:FAC. Last year Tcr25 and I worked to bring this article up to WP:GA status. More improvements have been made and I'm looking for an extra set of eyes to help elevate this article.
Comments by Chipmunkdavis
[edit]- The mention of "eroded coral heads" in Lagoon has no context, it has not been explained what coral heads are, why they are eroded, and what they are doing in the Lagoon. I'm curious as to why coral heads are worth mentioning instead of a simple shallow bottom, are they quite substantial?
- Some tense fixes might be in order in the crab vegetation section, "is virtually a sandy desert" seems to contradict later info suggesting the grass has expanded following rat introduction.
- Done "The population of sharks in the waters around the island was noted to have increased in both density and size of individuals in a 2019 expedition" compared to when?
- The paragraph about The Sea Around Us estimates notes the estimate includes illegal fishing, but does not note what the legal fishing is (implicitly legal and taxable per that paragraph).
- Anything about the 1999/2000 fishing wrecks that could also be included in Environmental threats?
- Similarly, surprised there is not more information about rats and potential interactions with nesting seabirds. There is a small mention in Fauna & Flora (perhaps it should be shifted?), but it focuses mainly on vegetation without mentioning specific impacts on birds.
- The Politics section notes a shift of jurisdiction from French Polynesia to the national government in 2007, but no context before that (although the lead does mention it was initially under Tahiti, so my assumption from that is it was the responsibility of French Polynesia since that point). It is probably also worth explaining whether the area was part of Tahiti/French Polynesia, as implied by the History section on its annexation, or merely administered by it, and if it was, at what point it became not part of French Polynesia (2007?) and why. The history section mentions a 1981ish shift as well, unclear how these all connect.
- Similarly, the "La Passion–Clipperton" name is mentioned without coverage of the previous (standard?) name of île de Clipperton.
- I am personally cautious of the widespread description of Clipperton Island as "private property"; it has always seemed a somewhat misplaced interpretation of 'directly under the French government' or similar that has spread unchecked online. State land is not usually described as private property, and I've not seen anything explaining why Clipperton is different. (Aside, if you have a quote from the Murray 2012 chapter, I'd appreciate it on personal interest.)
- Mexican claim subsubsection is a bit confusingly placed, as it is short and ends with its resolution when later subsections deal with various Mexican assertions of sovereignty.
- Reading the history section, the lead mention of Álvarez seems a bit of an overegging of what happened.
- "France formally took possession of Clipperton on January 26, 1935." What does this mean? If they already claimed it, surely they state they took posession in 1858.
- "In February 1945, the U.S. Navy transported French Officer Lieutenant Louis Jampierre to Clipperton out of San Diego[211] where he visited the installation and that afternoon returned to the United States." makes it sound like a one day trip, which seems unlikely so thought worth checking.
- "evaluate potential rehabilitation of the World War II era airstrip" is the first mention of this airstrip, previous mentions seemed to be mostly about the possibility of an airstrip but with no progress towards one.
- Should the castaways section include the 1999, 2000, and 2010 shipwrecks?