User:Dank/Blurbs
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# | prose topic | Cat. | Old version | New version |
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1 | vagueness | History | [He became] the unit's commanding officer. He participated in the battles of | [He] command[ed] the unit in the battles of |
2 | vagueness | History | The [musical] composition was ... related to his application for a [job] | ... supporting his application for a [job] |
3 | notability | Biology | [The proteins] are notable for their unusual mechanism of action, in which they | Their unusual mechanism of action [is] |
4 | causation | Biology | accumulation of the polymers, causing cell death and organ failure | accumulation of the polymers, which can cause cell death and even organ failure |
5 | repetition | Storms | The 2007 Atlantic hurricane season was an active Atlantic hurricane season | The 2007 Atlantic hurricane season was unusually active |
6 | controversy | Media | [she] was the subject of a scandal when nude photographs [appeared] | scandalous nude photographs [appeared] |
7 | vagueness | History | On D-Day, ... [they] were to assault | ... [they] assaulted |
8 | contrast | Biology | It is commonly known as ..., although it shares this latter name with | ..., a name it shares with |
9 | vagueness | Media | become involved in the investigation | join the investigation |
10 | verbiage | Media | It was the third and last of the ... [serials]. Like its predecessors, [it] was written by | ... serials, all written by |