Template:Did you know nominations/Charles Cabaniss

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:04, 3 July 2015 (UTC)

Charles Cabaniss

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• ... that the bullet which accidentally killed midshipman Charles Cabaniss ricocheted off his ship's gun and its deck, twice, before passing through his chest and injuring the man he was reprimanding?

• Comment: Will make a review when I get a chance

Created by A Texas Historian (talk). Self-nominated at 14:10, 26 May 2015 (UTC).

• Struck ALT0 because the article says nothing about reprimanding, only instructing.

ALT1 ... that in 1882 a bullet ricocheted off the deck of the USS Swatara, then off one of its guns, then off the deck again, before killing midshipman Charles Cabaniss? EEng (talk) 17:37, 26 May 2015 (UTC)

• New enough, long enough, well referenced, neutrally written. As most sources are offline, unable to check for close paraphrasing, but the NY Times image verifies some of the content. ALT1 offline hook ref AGF and cited inline. I shortened the hook for better effect. No QPQ needed for nominator with less than 5 DYKs. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 21:32, 28 June 2015 (UTC)

• The hook is still a bit clunky. Can I suggest :Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:10, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
• ALT2 ... that in 1882, midshipman Charles Cabaniss was killed by a bullet that ricocheted twice off the deck and once off a gun on the USS Swatara?

• Thank you, @Cwmhiraeth: that is definitely better. ALT2 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 23:59, 1 July 2015 (UTC)