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Caffey family murders
- ... that the sole survivor of the Caffey family murders escaped his burning house and crawled for an hour to a neighbor's following the crime?
ALT1: ... that the plan for the Caffey family murders began with a Myspace page?
Source: https://cbn.com/article/sin/terry-caffey-crime-passion
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Created by Jolielover (talk).
Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has fewer than 5 past nominations.
jolielover♥talk 14:33, 23 December 2024 (UTC).
Two issues that I have identified. The first is subjective: naming an otherwise non-notable victim of a crime like this in a hook is not my favorite option. I would encourage rephrasing ALT0 to swap out Caffey's name to "sole survivor" or something of that ilk. The second hook is a bit of a mischaracterization, as the discovery of the Myspace page was a catalyst for some of the grievance involved in the crime but not really integral to the plan (going by how CBN describes it). I recommend nixing ALT1 and hearing your perspective on ALT0. Otherwise, I think all is in order. ~ Pbritti (talk) 16:49, 24 December 2024 (UTC)
- @Pbritti: Thanks for the comment, and I agree, the second hook is not my favourite. I've adjusted ALT0 accordingly, let me know if anything else needs to be done! jolielover♥talk 16:55, 24 December 2024 (UTC)
