Talk:St Denys' Church, Sleaford/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 11:26, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi. I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this nomination. — Calvin999 17:37, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Info box and lead

Country parameter in the info box says United Kingdom, but the first line of the lead says England. I, personally, think England should be used. England is a country, United Kingdom is a sovereign state.

Done

which date to the late → which date back to the late

Done

century, first → century: first

Done

in electrical storm. → in an electrical storm

Done

Why does the info box not include the apostrophe at the Denys but include it in the lead?

Fixed—well caught!

The architectural historian Sir Nikolaus Pevsner states is → This doesn't read right

Fixed

Description

of Sleaford → Link Sleaford here, not in the 'most of the market town of Sleaford' part. Unless you've done this for a specific reason?

Done

History

David Roffe and Christine Mahan → Who are these people?

Information added (David Roffe is also a prominent Domesday academic)

early 13th, possibly c. 1220. → Doesn't 13th need to be followed by 'century'?

Yes, added

by Thomas Blount and John de Bucham, merchants, → the the merchants Thomas Blount and John de Bucham,

Tweaked as above

mid- to late → Is that hyphen supposed to be there?

Removed

looted the brass eagle lectern (last recorded in 1622),[23] broke the stained glass windows and the organ, and looted → Use of 'looted' is slightly repetitive.

Replaced last use with "stole"

builders Kirk and Parry; Yerburgh and Thomas Parry were → Is this the same Parry?

Yes - I believe I have clarified this - let me know what you think.

Is 'Kirk and Parry' the name of the builders, as in a duo?

Yes, but it was also the name they traded under; there were (successively) two Charles Kirks in the firm.

Outcome

On hold for 7 days. Interesting article. — Calvin999 17:58, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this on. Your comments are much appreciated and I have fixed all of them but the last two - could you perhaps clarify how best to tweak the wording for them? King regards, —Noswall59 (talk) 18:11, 19 August 2015 (UTC).[reply]

Ah okay I get it now. I was just a bit confused at first due to the omission of first names and then a full name after a surname. Everything else done? — Calvin999 18:21, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I can see everything is done. Passing. — Calvin999 19:01, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]