Talk:SocialWorks

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Social Works Peer Review

This article is strong, the intro is clear and your sources are numerous and reliable. Most of your writing is written in a neutral tone, one thing I would suggest is referring to "chance" as his actual name, or even just his last name "Bennet". I think this would help with separating the foundation from the celebrity. Below are some changes I made as suggestions in order to improve where needed. I think it's important to add a section on current work being done by the foundation, I have provided a link in the list below that includes an example. I would also go through your sources because a lot of them are repeated. Instead of creating a separate reference you can reuse a source when referencing it.

• here's a link that touches on some current work by the foundation, specifically about a partnership with Woodstock Music Festival: https://uproxx.com/hiphop/chance-the-rapper-charity-chicago-school-auditorium/
• sources #1 #7 and #9 appear to be the same, don't need to be listed twice.
• sources #32 and #33 are the same, should not be listed twice.
• sources #38 and #39 are also the same, they don't need to be listed twice.
• #2 #6 are the same
• #21 and #22 are the same
• #23 and #24 are the same
• ... and more go through and double check these and change your referencing as I explained above

Claireredden (talk) 15:40, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

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There is plenty of reliably sourced information inside of your article. Each section is relevant and indicative of the different specific projects of SocialWorks. I will list a few suggestions below to strengthen the scope of the goals you are working to achieve by writing this article.

• Most of the sections are about initiatives are programs specific to certain partnerships and projects. It would be helpful to add a section and add sources that more widely elaborate on the general goals and programs specific to SocialWorks itself. Your intro refers to the mission statement of the organization, so maybe you can expand upon the aspects of how/why they seek to raise money for mental health support, homelessness, the arts in Chicago, schools, etc.

• I'm sure you already know that you need to wikify everything that you can, i.e. the bulls, jewel osco, the field museum, etc.

• I second Taryn's suggestion about using "Chance" or "Bennett," the full "Chance the Rapper" identifier is used multiple times in your initiatives section, and it feels sort of exhausting to read the full name so much.

• Coming back to your article, I immediately found myself confused in regards to the partnerships section. If your goal is to point out the partnerships that are connected to each individual initiative that you describe in the "Initiatives" section, then it might be best to rework these sections so that you can omit this "partnerships section" at the bottom of your article, and integrate this into the Initiatives section. For example, you list DHS and Cook County Public Health as partners of the "My State of Mind" initiative; you can list these partners under "My state of mind" in your initiatives section, and elaborate more on what these partnerships actually mean. Then do the same thing for Open Mike, Support CPS, and so on and so forth. I think it would make more sense to omit your "Partnerships" section and move the descriptions into your "Initiatives" section, and elaborate on all of them, and you could give yourself some more solid content. Hope this makes sense and I hope it helps!!

• Make sure you reuse your citations in order to clean up your references section. I see "Chance the Philanthropist: His Maverick Approach" by Crain's Chicago Business is listed six different times in your source list. You also have other repeating sources, such as the articles by last names Rivera, Terry, and Briscoe. Comb through your references, and reuse whichever citations are repeating. It will definitely condense this section and will appear neater and much more concise!

Jhh2019 (talk) 19:55, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

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-This article has great use of quotes that highlight the mission statements/goals by the founders and others involved in the program that would lose meaning if rephrased.

-When referring to Chancellor Bennett, maybe try and use either "Chance" or "Bennett" instead of going back and forth between the two. One is his stage name and his given name seems to be the name articles use for him, so when referring to him in relation to Social Works, using "Bennett" seems better. Additionally, the first mention of him in the 'History' section (in the second sentence) is not by name but simply by "his". It would be good to use his name here since there hasn't been a prior establishment of who "his" refers to in this section.

-The 'History' section has a lot of great information, but it would perhaps flow better if it was told chronologically by starting with the "inception of the non-profit in 2015" before moving on to its announcement in 2016, the activities of 2017, and so on. -In the sentence(s) starting with "SocialWorks initiated the Support CPS and the New Chance: Arts and Literature Fund campaigns", there could be some information to date these activities.

-The last sentences in the 'History' section do a great job of summarizing/tying up the current history and transitioning into your next section

-In the 'Initiatives'/'My State of Mind' section, try adding the names of the six mental health providers that Social Works made donations to as to link them with other businesses or pages.

-In the 'Support CPS' section, is the sentence "A year after, SocialWorks announced $2.2 million dollars had been raised" in reference specifically to the support 'Support CPS' as a whole, or through a separate specific initiative? Just adding more context to the information in this section would be helpful. There seems to be more info about it than any other initiative, but a lot of what is in this section is lacking in detail.

-The setup for the 'OpenMike' section could be reworded. "OpenMike is a series of free monthly events, in Chicago, for high school students that could provide their school ID" is vague, and this is the first that people would read about OpenMike. Are these programs hosted in specific places? What are the "different partnerships that take place"?

-In the 'Kids of the Kingdom' section, the information seems very stretched out into more sentences when they could be combined to be more concise. Also, the information on your page says the program is "after school classes" but the link/source says they are summer classes. For example, "This after school program serves children in Chicago metropolitan. Classes started in 2017 and are serving 75 Chicago kids.[44] The classes are first come first serve and free to students. The classes that are offered are audio mastering classes", could read "Kids of the Kingdom is a program created in 2017 by Social Works and LANDR Music to provide additional audio mastering classes after school for students in the Chicago metropolitan area. Starting in June of 2017, 75 Chicago kids participated in this program through the Kids of the Kingdom Summer Music Academy".

-As far as "Parade to the Polls" I'm sure there is more coverage or information on this if it was a concert event, so maybe try filling this section out a bit more.

-Overall, this article is very informative and your sources look great, just make sure that the wiki page reflects the information from your sources and tells the whole story cohesively.

Tkracinski (talk) 15:36, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

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This is definitely a good start for an article on Social works. This article contained a lot of information regarding the charity so far, and included a lot of details. Given its popularity and the fact that Chance the Rapper is behind it, I was surprised that SocialWorks didn't have its own Wikipedia article before this, but this is definitely a great start to one. Here are some suggestions to help improve this article. One major suggestion would definitely be to refer to Chance the Rapper by his real surname, Bennett. On top of the other reasons listed by my partners, it just looks nicer to read and feels more professional than listing "Chance" over and over again.

• Where it says “His nonprofit charity” in the second sentence under History, change the word “His” to “The” or “Bennett's”

• Is there an exact day in August 2016 that the charity was registered? If so, find this and include it as an exact date rather than just the month and year.

• Include the date in 2016 that the Magnificent Day of Coloring took place and when the charity was announced. Including the exact date instead of a more vague time period is always preferred, especially for a well-known charity such as this one.

• Remove the comma between “came into formation, under the partnership of” in the second-to-last sentence of paragraph one.

• ”Which raise(s)...” [include the s, first sentence of paragraph two]

• ”awarded with a grant of ($)1 million” [include the dollar sign, paragraph 3 under History]

• Do the same for the fourth paragraph after Jewel Osco's donation

• Link to Jewel Osco's wikipedia page

• Link to Google's Wikipedia page, and refer to the company as “Google” rather than “google.org."

• In the list of the organization's other campaigns, use ; instead of commas between each campaign, and use the word “which” in describing them. For example: My State of Mind, which raises funds to increase accessibility to mental health services; The Warmest Winter, which operates clothing drives for the homeless; OpenMike, which supports young artists in Chicago; and Kids of the Kingdom, which provides funding for educational summer programs

Individual2 (talk) 02:19, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

Notes

I have some notes:

• I switched up the writing for the mention of Google in the history section. You have to be careful when you mention donations or partnerships, as you want to be to the point and only include what absolutely needs to be added, as otherwise it could be seen as either indiscriminate information or promotional, even if either was unintentional.
• Make sure that when you write sentences, that you aren't starting too many of them in the same way, as this comes across as a little redundant as far as reading goes - it's better to merge the sentences together in some cases.
• When using quotes, make sure that you attribute them to the person making them. I also removed the quotations around the words state funding cuts and clinic closings, as those could come across as scare quotes.

I'll leave more feedback in a minute, but wanted to post this since I made recent edits. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:38, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
OK, more feedback:

• The Warmest Winter section feels kind of clunky. I tried creating a re-write, but I'm not sure how much better it is. Definitely feel free to use and adapt it freely.
• The Support CPS section was a little vague, as it didn't really clarify if it was a hashtag, an initiative, a fund, or something different. I've tried my hand at a re-write based on the content, but this may need a bit more work. Again, feel free to adapt and use what I've added.
• The Partnerships and donors section needs to be merged into the respective initiatives they've funded. Just a single sentence to each would be good.
• I tweaked the film festival section. I removed the cost of tickets and also summarized the quote. Since there aren't many ways to rephrase it I don't know that there needs to be quotation marks around it.

I hope this all helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:45, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Ekarns2 Peer Review

Do you guys have more information on Parade to the Polls? Like how many people attended? I think that would be good information to add to see how big of an impact Social Works had on young peoples votes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ekarns2 (talk • contribs) 15:42, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

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