Talk:Shō Hashi/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 19:54, 13 November 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 05:43, 6 December 2024 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Remarks

• Some background to the small kingdoms and their relationship with each other and China could be helpful (not more than two or three sentences).
  • Done. - G
• Introduce the Ryukyu Kingdom as an island nation in the West Pacific.
  • Done. - G
• Introduce Kyushu as an island.
  • Done. - G
• Link and introduce Okinawa as an island.
  • Done. - G
• Introduce Kyuyo.
  • Done. - G
• Explain gusuko with one or two words.
  • Done. - G
• Introduce and link Chuzan.
  • Done. - G
• Bunei, the king of Chūzan, had several men castrated and sent to serve as eunuchs in the court of the Yongle Emperor in 1406. The emperor reacted poorly to this, ordering them returned and stating that it was intolerable that innocent men should be subjected to such treatment. Relevant? If yes,

• Make it clear the the Yongle Emperor ruled China.

• • Relevant since its what made him lose favor of the emperor; but clarified. - G

• ...ordering them returned... Is this grammatical?

• • Rephrased. - G

Borsoka (talk) 05:52, 6 December 2024 (UTC)

• What does a longevity adviser?
  • Elaborated. - G
• Introduce the Ming Veritable Reports.
  • Done. - G
• ...Ming Veritable Records record... Rephrase.
  • Done. - G
• Explain aji with one or two words.
  • Done. - G
• Introduce Yomitanzan and I doubt he was a castle (as the links suggests).
  • Made this sentence more clear. - G
• Sanzan kingdoms?
  • Elaborated. - G
• Introduce Hashiman. Borsoka (talk) 07:37, 6 December 2024 (UTC)
  • Done. - G

@Borsoka: Okay! Got to everything here. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 19:12, 12 December 2024 (UTC)

@Borsoka: Just checking if there's anything else I gotta get to here - no worries if you're busy. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 00:04, 19 December 2024 (UTC)

Source review

• Specialised academic sources are cited.
• Be consistent when mentioning a journal: Ikemiya (location is missing), Smits 2010 and McNally (location and publisher are missing)
• Pearson (1991): dead doi link, ISBN is missing
• Smits (2014): location is missing
  • Removed location on everything, added publishers, fixed the dead doi. That conference's papers don't seem to have an ISBN, so I added an OCLC. - G
• References 13 and 27 are verified.
• Could you quote the text from the cited sources here (on the review page) verifying the following sentences?

• While Urasoe Castle was the seat of power in Chūzan under Bunei, historians believe that the official histories reported Shuri anachronistically as the capital of Ryukyu in order to further legitimize its authority.

• I remembered that was from one of the Smits sources actually, but I couldn't find the section anywhere! I just removed it; it's not super relevant to Hashi anyhow. - G

• The official histories portray Hashi as both a spiritually and militarily gifted ruler, embodying archetypal leadership qualities.

• "Therefore, he is portrayed as a castle lord with spiritual power that subdues other domains. [...] The official histories’ portrayal of Shō Hashi as Okinawa’s first full king, embodying all three functions, mirrors the qualities of the Chinese emperor." - Smits, 2019, p. 86

• Royal genealogies alternatively describe him as the son of Kinpuku or the seventh son of Hashi, although he was likely unrelated to the other kings of the dynasty.

• "Two of these quarrelsome kings were Shō Taikyū and Shō Toku. The official histories list them as kings of the first Shō dynasty, but they do not seem to fit into the family. Indeed, much of the dynasty is suspicious as a lineage of biological relatives. [...] When Kinpuku died, his son Shiro and his brother Furi killed each other in a succession dispute. Shō Taikyū was the next king, but official sources disagree on his pedigree. Reflections on Chūzan says Taikyū was Kinpuku’s first son." - Smits, 2019, pp. 113–114

• @Borsoka: There you go, thank you very much as always! Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 07:57, 20 December 2024 (UTC)