Talk:Out from Under/GA1
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Reviewer: Toa Nidhiki05 (talk · contribs) 00:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)
I'm going to be reviewing this. Expect a full review by the end of today or tomorrow, at least. Toa Nidhiki05 00:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Prose is of passable quality, in most cases. One error is in the sentence "Spears revealed that she "have always loved ballads. It's like, there is always a time on the show, a transition where you can gather your thoughts, and [...] just chill". Change 'have' to [has]. The formatting of the article seems good, but the "Despite not being released as a single from Circus, "Out from Under" was featured on the fifth season of MTV's The Hills, during a scene where Lauren Conrad comforts Heidi Montag." sentence should be added under an 'In Popular Culture' subsection under the 'Reception' section. It does not belong in 'background'.
- a (prose):
- Fixed. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:20, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
- Alright, good.
- Fixed. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:20, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Referencing is a more serious issue here. The 'Tales From The Studio - Britney's Circus' source is a book, but no weblink is given, nor is a direct quote from the book supporting the statement given. The Washington Post review is not sourced. Additionally, as annoying as it is, all direct quotes must be cited immediately after the quote ends, even if it ends mid-sentence. The 'reception' section has a couple that do not do that.
- a (references):
- Fixed all the references, except for the Blender one. The source here is exactly like on other GAs such as "Womanizer", "Circus" and others. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:20, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
- Alright, this part is good now.
- Fixed all the references, except for the Blender one. The source here is exactly like on other GAs such as "Womanizer", "Circus" and others. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:20, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Good job of making sure it is both broad and focused.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Overall, very neutral. However, while the lede mentions 'critics' considered it her best ballad since "I'm Not a Girl, Not Yet A Woman", only one critic out of the the ten provided gave that comment. Perhaps you can keep it up there, but note that it was the opinion of one critic, not many.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No issues with edit warring.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- No images are used, so there is really no problem here.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I'm going to place this article on hold for a week (seven days), the standard period of time for holding. While this is by no means a bad article (I found it an enjoyable read), the issues here are not minor enough to warrant a 'quick fix', as some involve referencing and neutrality. If the issues are solved before the date, then I will be glad to pass this early. If these are not dealt with by that time, I will fail it.
- Pass/Fail:
- Alright, very good - passed!