Talk:Operation Starlite/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 10:54, 31 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The source for "File:OperationStarlight.jpg" is dead.
- I've replaced the dead link. Mztourist (talk) 11:07, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The source given for "File:Operationstarlite1965.jpg" does not link to the image.
- I've replaced the dead link. Mztourist (talk) 11:45, 1 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Gog the Mild (talk) 10:54, 31 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I have done some copy editing. Let me know if you are unhappy with any of it.

The lead is on the short side.
"General William Westmoreland told Walt" Walt needs to be re-introduced in the main article.
"At about the same time, section received corroborative information" Is ther a word or number missing before "section"?
Link sampan.
Any chance of a map showing the location of the battle within Vietnam?
- I've added coordinates
"carried the high ground" An entirely correct use of "carried", but most readers won't understand it in this context. Any chance of changing it?
"point opposite An Cuong. Under fire from the hamlets" Should "hamlets" be singular? If not, could the other(s) be named?
The two long paragraphs in "Battle" need splitting.
""even these were interspersed with hedgerows of hardwood and bamboo thickets. Are the opening quote marks a typo?
"An Cuong itself, consisted of 25-30 huts, fighting holes and camouflaged trench lines" I know what you are trying to say, but this doesn't say it.
"As the company cleared the first few houses" Houses or huts?
"1st Lt. Richard M. Purnell" If you are going to use an abbreviation, which I would advise against in this case, it should be given in brackets after the first use in full.
Could you give a publisher location for all books (preferred) or none.
Link paddies.
"to dispatch of "our mobile (LVT) resupply" to Company I, which, at the time, was only a "few hundred yards" in front of the command group." Could there be a cite to the source of the quotes no later than the end of the sentence.
"The company entered An Cuong against surprisingly little resistance" Do we need the PoV "surprisingly"?
"Company I, 3rd Battalion, 7th Marines on USS Iwo Jima were landed by HMM-163 helicopters shortly after 09:30." Is the time correct? It seems very out of chronological order.
"There it was placed under the operational control of Muir, who ordered them to" "them/"it" Which?
"evidently forced the VC 60th Battalion to break contact" Could we have mention of the VC 60th Battalion earlier in the "Battle" section.
- Its there in the 3rd paragraph, LZ Blue was almost on top of the VC 60th Battalion
The last paragraph seems out of place. Wouldn't it fit better in the Planning section?

More to follow. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:30, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Gog! All changes made other than as noted above. I look forward to receiving your further comments Mztourist (talk) 03:19, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"few hundred yards" Could there be a cite to the source of the quote no later than the end of the sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:10, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Thanks Gog Mztourist (talk) 04:02, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Another good piece of work. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 07:46, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Gog, much appreciated. Battle of Xuan Loc next? Mztourist (talk) 08:08, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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