Talk:João Sousa/GA3

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I will be reviewing this in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

This has improved considerably after the last two reviews. Here are my comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:28, 9 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Per the MOS the lead should be a summary of the major points of the article, and thus a subset of the main article. It seems it has some points that are absent in the main article.
See that citations are kept only for potentially controversial points. All others are expected to be mentioned in the main article and sourced there itself.

Early and personal life

Mention when he was born
- Done
and Os Sandinenses until...after its closure. Source?
- Done
He speaks fluently Portuguese... I think "He is fluent in..." sounds better
- Done, I agree

Pre-2008

I think some consistency is needed in which locations are wikilinked and which not.
- Done, all locations are now wikilinked
where he also reached his first singles final You mean "junior" singles final? Because he already has a title to his name by now.
- Done, I agree that the way it is might me misleading

2008–2012

winning both singles dead rubbers he took part in over Philippos Tsangaridis from Cyprus I think there should be an emdash before "over"
- Done
his last to date Better say something like "last as of 2016", we should be sure this remains updated
- Done
becoming the fourth Portuguese player It was he and not his ranking that "became" this.
- Done

2013

Despite being knocked out of both tournaments in the first round I think there is some overciting here, only two refs are used in similar cases elsewhere
world number three Say "3" as you do elsewhere after "world number".
former top 10 Jürgen Melzer former top 10 "ranker"?
Say "World number" or "World no." And at some places you say "the then-world number" (which is understood, and need not be mentioned). There should be consistency in this.

2016

He will next play at the Open Sud de France I think this was last edited in January 2016. Any updates since then?

Playing style

as a tough opponent who never backs down from a fight Perhaps use some quote marks
There don't seem to be any wikilinks here, you may try linking some tennis terms

Equipment and endorsements

He criticized local government "the" local
lack of support of sports other than football "to" sports

Sources

It seems some claims were found not to be in the cited source in the previous review, so I will check them as far as I can and advise you to do so as well.

Is every point of the infobox sourced here or somewhere else?
Sources for each table in "Career statistics" should be explicitly mentioned, probably in a line preceding the table.

@SOAD KoRn: Please respond. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:05, 14 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Dear Sainsf, I apologize for not having come here sooner. Thank you for taking the time to review the article. Even today I will start attending to each one of your comments. Regards. SOAD KoRn (talk) 10:12, 14 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Once again, I apologize for not delivering any comments today. It has been a long day of work, but tomorrow I will carefully work on every note you posted. Regards. SOAD KoRn (talk) 21:33, 14 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I thank you for your patience. Fortunately, this weekend I will finally have some time to work on the article. SOAD KoRn (talk) 04:14, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@SOAD KoRn: Please respond. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:19, 21 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am right now working on it. Once again, I thank you for the patience. Regards. SOAD KoRn (talk) 22:23, 22 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Later, I will attend to the remaining points and I will check all sources, as advised. SOAD KoRn (talk) 23:22, 22 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@SOAD KoRn: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:23, 26 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No response from the nominator since a week. Sorry but I will have to fail this. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:45, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]