Talk:Interstate 81 in Tennessee/GA1
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Reviewer: Floydian (talk · contribs) 01:25, 19 January 2023 (UTC)
I will review this article. - Floydian τ ¢ 01:25, 19 January 2023 (UTC)
- RD
- The use of "later" is a tad excessive. Try alternatives such as "beyond which" or "shortly/soon thereafter".
- The paragraphs are oddly constructed, I suggest rearranging them a bit to make three:
- "the interstate crosses over a ridge and into Greene County.{split} About five miles (8.0 km) beyond this point" - split the paragraph here and change "this point" to "the Green County boundary" or something similar.
- Done
- "A few miles later, I-81 shifts sharply east and crosses into semi-urban Washington County. Immediately beyond this point is an interchange with SR 93, which provides access to Jonesborough to the south and Fall Branch to the north. I-81 then turns northeast again and, a short distance later, crosses into Sullivan County." - move this into the previous paragraph.
- Done
- "the interstate crosses over a ridge and into Greene County.{split} About five miles (8.0 km) beyond this point" - split the paragraph here and change "this point" to "the Green County boundary" or something similar.
- We really need something more than just Google maps. Do you have a road map of Tennessee or of the states that you can add?
- Done - added county maps from TDOT. These are more detailed than statewide maps.
- RJL
Gonna reference exit numbers here
- 1/57/74 - use of "exit" vs. "Exit" is inconsistent. Usually it is capitalised.
- I don't think "exit" is a proper name here. I've uncapped all.
- 63 - remove "Also"
- Done
- 57 - add refs from the article for the "former" bit
- Done
- Images
- All check out for free licencing, suggest adding alt text, but not a necessity for GAN
- History
- "The general location of the highway that became I-81 was included in a plan released on August 2, 1947, by the Public Roads Administration of the now-defunct Federal Works Agency for the nationwide highway network that became the Interstate Highway System, which recommended that it terminate east of Knoxville with what became I-40." - Even in my head this is a tongue-twister. There must be a better way to describe the government agencies.
- Done - I've reworded and split the run on sentence. Please let me know if this is adequate.
- "During the planning phase, the highway was also suggested to generally follow the corridor of" - oddly wordy. "During planning, it was suggested that the highway follow the corridor of"
- Done - Reworded. I feel like including "also" is important, however, since this wasn't the only (and original) alignment that was suggested during the planning phase. Feel free to suggest a better way to reword this if you have any ideas.
- "The segment between the southern terminus with I-40 and US 25E near Morristown was contracted in June 1964" - "was contracted" should be expanded upon.
- Done - It means the contract for construction was awarded.
- "who had served as Governor from 1959 to 1963," - "had" is unnecessary
- "Work on the stretch between US 25E near Morristown and US 11E near Mosheim was contracted in August 1967 and February 1968" - again with "contracted", it's an odd use of the verb. Maybe "Contracts were let on the stretch... in August..."
- "what became the final stretch of I-81 in Tennessee to be completed ... The last section of I-81 in Tennessee, located in Greene County" - These don't align well. Also there's the use of contracted as a verb right after, and it makes me feel like I have an STD :)
- Done - reworded to distinguish between the last stretch to open (Mosheim to Blountville) and the last stretch to be placed under construction (Greene County), of which the latter was part of the former. Please let me know if you think this is better understandable. I also added a small detail about the Greene County stretch.
- "Completion of I-81 in Tennessee was expected by late 1973 once all remaining construction had begun," -> "Once all remaining construction began, completion of I-81 in Tennessee was expected by late 1973,"
- Done
- "Initially planned to be completed in late 2000," -> "Initially planned for completion in late 2000,"
- Done
- "on-ramp" -> "onramp"
- Done
And that's all I've got. I'm placing this on hold, but I won't hold (lolpun) you to the 7 day limit - Floydian τ ¢ 00:46, 22 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Floydian: - I believe I've addressed all the issues you've raised. Please let me know if my changes are adequate, and I also have a few things I have debated including. I will post them below soon. Bneu2013 (talk) 07:57, 22 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Bneu2013, looks good to me. I'm just waiting to see the things you were debating including, but if that's more of a long term plan, I can pass this as it is now. - Floydian τ ¢ 01:14, 25 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Floydian: Thanks. The only real concern I had deals with the alternate alignment that was advocated by some. I haven't found any evidence that this was ever seriously considered by any federal agency, and I don't want the article to give the impression of this. I also don't want the article to give the impression that community opposition, i.e. highway revolts, prevented the highway from being built in Grainger County; I don't think that would have been possible in the 1950s. I wish I could find more sources dealing with the other (weakly proposed) routing, but so far I have been unsuccessful. Another editor a while back added a statement that the highway's alignment resulted from the actions of a U.S. Senator; however, the source they provided didn't support this, and I couldn't find any other sources to corroborate this. I think it may have been an unfounded accusation by someone. Anyways, you can go ahead and pass if you think it's ready, and thanks for reviewing! Bneu2013 (talk) 03:04, 25 January 2023 (UTC)
- Do you have access to The Wikipedia Library? If not, I can do a search for you and email you some clips. I've got access to Newspapers.com and ProQuest. In either case, reach out to me on my talk page. I'm going to pass this for now! - Floydian τ ¢ 03:50, 25 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Floydian: Thanks. The only real concern I had deals with the alternate alignment that was advocated by some. I haven't found any evidence that this was ever seriously considered by any federal agency, and I don't want the article to give the impression of this. I also don't want the article to give the impression that community opposition, i.e. highway revolts, prevented the highway from being built in Grainger County; I don't think that would have been possible in the 1950s. I wish I could find more sources dealing with the other (weakly proposed) routing, but so far I have been unsuccessful. Another editor a while back added a statement that the highway's alignment resulted from the actions of a U.S. Senator; however, the source they provided didn't support this, and I couldn't find any other sources to corroborate this. I think it may have been an unfounded accusation by someone. Anyways, you can go ahead and pass if you think it's ready, and thanks for reviewing! Bneu2013 (talk) 03:04, 25 January 2023 (UTC)