Talk:Happiness (Red Velvet song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:06, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

It is ideal for me to review the article on this occasion, as I am the one who completed the first review, which will be relevant here. --K. Peake 07:06, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

 Done

Target Euro-pop to Europop Done
"as their debut single" → "as the group's debut single" with the target Done
"the group's first release under the "Red" concept" → "their first release under the Red Velvet moniker" for accuracy Removed
Like in the previous review, the well-known/introduction sentence is not sourced in the body Removed
"A vibrant urban Euro-pop track," → "An urban Euro-pop track," because the word "vibrant" is not appropriate for the lead Done
Even though you should write about what critics commented on, use summarizing instead of quotes plus add both positive and negative Done
"The music video was released on August 3, 2014 but a new version of the music video" → "An accompanying music video was released on August 3, 2014, but a new version" with the wikilink Done
Mention that it was due to "references to" the bombings then put "and" followed by mentioning the attacks Done
"The debut stage for "Happiness" was performed in" → "Red Velvet's debut stage for the song was a performance on" Done
"and further promotions was" → "and further promotion was" Done

Background and composition

 Done

The 2013 and 2014 parts are still not sourced Removed
"Rumors have since sparked out" → "Rumors soon sparked out" Done
Wikilink music video Done
"for the "Happiness" was" → "for "Happiness" was" plus this can remain here, as it is about this being their first song when teased Done
The first girl group part is still unsourced Removed
Audio sample looks good! Done
Again, the synth, African music beat and "Red" parts need to be sourced Done
9 offers a mention of electronic sound that you could do with writing in Done
"of 121 beat-per-minute." → "of 121 beat-per-minutes." Done
Wikilink Yoo Young-jin Done

Reception

 Done

"further saying that" → "further noticing how" Done
The singles of the year and award should come before the commercial info, being the second para while the latter is the third Done
"The song has since sold" → "The song has sold" because "since" is redundant when you have wrote "as of" Done
"The song received a nomination" → "It received a nomination" Done

Music video

  Done

Background

Wikilink imagery Done
Remove the official music video sentence because that is repeating the first sentence of this sub-section Done
Wikilink music video on the img text and invoke [27] solely at the end of the sentence after [6] Done

Synopsis and reception

"patterns and combination of live action animations." → "patterns, and combination of live action and animation." per the source Done
27 says about a split screen that you have not mentioned here Done
"it shows of dynamic camera movements" → "it has dynamic camera movements" Done
"from reality overcoming" → "from reality, overcoming" Done
There are parts like the roller coaster from 6 that you have not mentioned even though they're notable Done
"described the group's" → "noted Red Velvet's" Done
"on the music video." → "in the music video." Done
"On December 3 2020," → "On December 3, 2020," Done
"YouTube becoming the first" → "YouTube, with them becoming the first" with the wikilink Done
"and ninth music video of" → "while it was the ninth music video of" Done

Controversy

"When I inquired with the music video director, it was said that there was no intention because it was simply using the image source of the collage technique." is the first statement said by [32], but you have quoted otherwise without using []; is this an error or is my translator just poor? Done
Regarding the second statement, the source only says the label removed the content and "I will take care to prevent this from happening in the future." Done

Live performances

 Done

"in SM Town Live World Tour IV at" → "for SM Town Live World Tour IV at the" Done

Track listing

 Done

Good Done

Credits and personnel

 Done

Credits adapted from the liner notes of Happiness. → Credits adapted from the liner notes of "Happiness". Done
Shouldn't you mention the recording studios being in Seoul? Done
Target Red Velvet to Red Velvet (group) Done
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel Done

Charts

 Done

Weekly charts

Target World Digital Songs to World Digital Song Sales Done

Monthly charts

Add on the caption that it is the August 2014 monthly chart performance for "Happiness" Done

Release history

 Done

Format → Format(s) Done
Label → Label(s) Done
Apart from refs, the cols should not be centered Done

References

 Done

Copyvio score looks amazing at 10.7%!!! Done
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool Done
Wikilink Asia Business Daily on ref 3 Done
Cite Hankook Ilbo as work instead for ref 6 with the wikilink, removing the other one Done
Cite Melon as publisher instead for ref 7 Done
WP:OVERLINK of Hankook Ilbo on ref 12 Done
Cite Gaon Music Chart as publisher instead for refs 14, 15, 16 and 41 Done
WP:OVERLINK of Billboard for refs 18 and 26 Done
Cite JoongAng Ilbo as work instead for ref 20, removing the other one Done
Cite Mnet America as publisher instead for ref 22 Done
Remove work from ref 23 Done
Remove publisher from ref 24 Done
Remove work from ref 27 Done
Ditto for ref 31 Done
Target Sports Chosun to The Chosun Ilbo on ref 36 and remove the publisher Done
Make sure "Happiness" isn't italicized for ref 40 – add ''" "'' to the ends – plus wikilink SM Entertainment Done
WP:OVERLINK of Melon on ref 43 Done

The comments for the review have been

Resolved

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Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but this is definitely a lot better than the last time I reviewed! --K. Peake 10:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: All comments on the review regarding the article have all been resolved. I'm sorry for the mistakes regarding you saying "Again" when it comes to the previous review. :) I'm working hard in improving myself on nominating and editing articles that could be listed under "GA". Also, thank you so much for the effort! I do always appreciate the effort you're giving in making these reviews! You really are the best! Hope to work with you soon once again! :) --LipaCityPH 00:26, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@LipaCityPH: Fantastic job; you had made a few mistakes when adding in new info, but since those were not issues that existed at the time of review I thought it would be fine for me to copyedit the fixes in. ✓ Pass now, plus you only missed out on one actual requested change with ref formatting so I copyedited it in. --K. Peake 07:45, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]