Talk:Hands on a Hardbody (musical)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 01:14, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Unfortunately this is a quick fail for a few reasons.

• The lead is extremely short considering the length of the article; it doesn't summarize the article in an adequate manner.
• The prose is very low quality and unprofessional, which is especially notable in the "Synopsis" section; some examples are:
  • It's a ways into the competition now and no one has fallen yet.
  • Thusly, he isn't doing so well.
  • Act II begins almost like a commercial (almost? what does that mean?)
  • Contestants begin dropping like flies
• While the most notable errors are in "Synopsis" other prose errors are present, for example, in the article's first section, with wrongly placed commas and an unnecesary repetition of "2013" and "2014". Overall, the article is not "well-written" as expected by the GA criteria. I recommend copyediting the article throroughly or asking at WP:GOCE for a copyedit.
• The article is definitely not broad in its coverage for multiple reasons; in general, a search for "hands on a hardbody musical" will reveal a multitude or sources that should be incorporated into the article, and not incorporating them creates an incomplete article that is not broad. Here are some notable examples of this:
  • There is absolutely nothing about how the musical was produced or how the casting was done (for any of its iterations). Searching for "hands on a hardbody musical interview", I could easily find content that could be incorporated related to production and casting: [1], [2], for example.
  • The Reception section is extremely short and there is potential for expansion. While you have included only two reviews, there are many more that should be added. Here are some from 2012 and 2013: [3] [4] [5] [6]
  • Above I only linked 2012 and 2013 reviews; there is absolutely no mention of the 2019 production of the show, which was also reviewed: [7] [8] (and it was also produced in other years, too), meaning the article is very outdated.

As such, I am failing this article for being too far from complying with the GA criteria 1a and 3a. Skyshiftertalk 01:14, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

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