Talk:Francis Dzierozynski/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:32, 19 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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" in White Marsh, Maryland endured" WP:GEOCOMMA after Maryland.
- Done. Ergo Sum 17:31, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" at novitiate in Połock. He studied at the novitiate" at novitiate vs at the novitiate, and either way, a little repetitive.
- Streamlined. Ergo Sum 17:32, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is a "collegium " different to a college? There's no link or explanation.
- That's just what some Jesuit colleges in Europe were named. I plan on making an article about that specific one. Ergo Sum 17:33, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"students[4] in the Jesuit College.[5]" move that [4] to in front of [5].
- Done. Ergo Sum 17:35, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" three of which spent spent at sea" replace the first "spent" with "was".
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 17:35, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The president of Georgetown College" vs "with Vice President John C. Calhoun" capitalisation inconsistency?
- Well, one is a title, whereas the other is just referring to the office. For example, if it said President Fenwick, then it would be capitalized. Basing this on Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Titles of people Ergo Sum 17:36, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" as superior of the Jesuit Mission in Maryland. As superior, ..." repetitive.
- Streamlined. Ergo Sum 17:38, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Dzierozynski continued teaching at Georgetown...." seems like a strange phrase here.
- Rephrased. Ergo Sum 17:39, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" In 1827, he... Missouri in 1827" - perhaps "the same year" instead of repeating?
- Rephrased. Ergo Sum 17:39, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" the whole church", forgive my ignorance but as this is a specific "Church" (i.e. group) shouldn't this be Church, not church?
- Yes. Certainly, one can raise some thorny theological questions there, but I think most would accept your reading of it. Ergo Sum 17:41, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" conducted by a legally separate entity (the Corporation of Roman Catholic Clergymen)" perhaps " conducted by the Corporation of Roman Catholic Clergymen, acting as a legally separate entity"
- Rephrased. Ergo Sum 17:42, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" Propaganda Fide" probably needs to be italicised.
- Done. Ergo Sum 17:43, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Refs 3, 10, 30 need "pp" instead of "p"
- Done. Ergo Sum 17:44, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Not much else to say at this stage. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:29, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thank you, as always. Ergo Sum 17:44, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No worries. Happy with the changes, so I will promote. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:51, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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