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Biased?

This kind of reads like an advertisment for TELUS rather than a biography —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.108.31.36 (talk) 21:48, 17 July 2009 (UTC)


30 years in TELCO?

Kinda tough I'd think considering that would make him 17 when he entered the industry? 207.81.141.208 (talk) 01:29, 22 September 2010 (UTC)

Title Change

As of May 8, 2014, Darren Entwistle will no longer be President and CEO of TELUS. His new title is Executive Chair of TELUS. The opening paragraph of the page should be edited to reflect this change. COI disclosure: I am a TELUS employee. Sources: http://business.financialpost.com/2014/03/31/telus-corp-ceo-darren-entwistle-steps-down-joe-natale-takes-helm/?__lsa=9fde-2c89, http://about.telus.com/community/english/news_centre/news_releases/blog/2014/03/31/telus-announces-leadership-progression

Darren Entwistle's official bio is located here: http://about.telus.com/community/english/investor_relations/corporate_team/executive_team/darren_entwistle Dixxy88 (talk) 20:37, 7 May 2014 (UTC)

Lastly, I am looking to update the External Links Section to include the following:

--Saara rahikka (talk) 17:22, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018- 1:22 EST

 Not done per WP:ELMINOFFICIAL Chetsford (talk) 21:10, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

Intro Update

Hello! I am on the communications team at TELUS, looking to request some factual changes and to add a new section entirely. To keep things easy, I will post the changes section by section. Starting with the intro.

Extended content

The current intro reads

Darren Entwistle (born 1962) [1] is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company.[2] Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3] and shortly after initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.[4]

I am looking to change it to:

Darren Entwistle (born 1962) [1] is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company.[2]

References:
1- Lori Bamber. "On the Line with Darren Entwistle". BCBusiness. 2- http://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/Telecommunications --Saara rahikka (talk) 15:45, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018- 11:45 EST

I am also looking to update the biography section

I am looking to change the biography section to:

Born in Montreal, Quebec,[5] Entwistle received a Bachelor of Economics (Honours) from Concordia University, an MBA (Finance) from the McGill University Desautels Faculty of Management and a diploma in Network Engineering from the University of Toronto.[6]

References:

5. Elizabeth Lumley (2008). Canadian Who's Who 2008: Volume 43. 6. "McGill University: Darren Entwistle, Governor". Globe and Mail.

--Saara rahikka (talk) 16:01, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018 - 12:04 EST

I am also looking to make changes to the Career section

I would like to change the Career section to the following:

Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3]. He previously spent seven years as an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999. Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless leader. Entwistle initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.[4] This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008, which became the health arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International.

References:

3- "The TELUS Executive Team - About TELUS". about.telus.com. Retrieved 15 October 2017 4- "Telus and Clearnet Merge - The Canadian Encyclopedia". Thecanadianencyclopedia.com. Retrieved 15 October 2017.

--Saara rahikka (talk) 16:23, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018- 12:22 EST

Community involvement

I am also looking to add an entirely new section to this Wiki page titled: Community Involvement , with the following information included:

In 2005, Entwistle introduced the first of 18 TELUS Community Boards that support local, grassroots charities in Canada and around the world. Entwistle serves on the board of the Gairdner Foundation and is a founding member of the 30% Club Canada. His past directorships include the Board Diversity Council, George Weston Limited, the Business Council of Canada, TD Bank Financial Group, McGill University Board of Governors and the Bell Cablemedia Plc in the United Kingdom.

References added:

--Saara rahikka (talk) 16:56, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018- 12:56 EST

Professional recognition

I am also looking to update the Professional Recognition Section. There are three entries in bold, which are the new additions. Is it also possible to update all of the dates, and just include the years? As opposed to month and year? Thanks!

References for bolded/just added recognitions:

--Saara rahikka (talk) 17:14, 27 April 2018 (UTC)

April 27, 2018- 1:15 EST

Reply quote box with inserted reviewer decisions and feedback 03-MAY-2018

Below you will see where text from your request has been quoted with individual advisory messages placed underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please see the enclosed notes for additional information about each request.   spintendo          23:41, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

Darren Entwistle (born 1962) is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company.
 Already done.[note 1]
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Born in Montreal, Quebec,[5] Entwistle received a Bachelor of Economics (Honours) from Concordia University, an MBA (Finance) from the McGill University Desautels Faculty of Management and a diploma in Network Engineering from the University of Toronto.
 Already done.[note 2]
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Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3]. He previously spent seven years as an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999. Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless leader. Entwistle initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.[4] This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008, which became the health arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International.
exclamation mark  Clarification needed.[note 3]
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Community Involvement , with the following information included: In 2005, Entwistle introduced the first of 18 TELUS Community Boards that support local, grassroots charities in Canada and around the world. Entwistle serves on the board of the Gairdner Foundation and is a founding member of the 30% Club Canada. His past directorships include the Board Diversity Council, George Weston Limited, the Business Council of Canada, TD Bank Financial Group, McGill University Board of Governors and the Bell Cablemedia Plc in the United Kingdom.
no Not approved.[note 4]
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I am also looking to update the Professional Recognition Section. There are three entries in bold, which are the new additions. 2010: Named an Honorary Fellow of the Royal Conservatory of Music. 2016 – Accepted an honorary doctorate from the University of Victoria.
 Approved.
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2016 – Named Canada’s Most Admired CEO by Waterstone Human Capital.
no Not approved.[note 5]
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  1. ^ The asked-for changes made in this section of the edit request are already in the article.
  2. ^ The asked-for changes made in this section of the edit request are already in the article.
  3. ^ The references provided for this section are to websites related to the subject's employer. These connections to the subject could impart a sense of bias in their reporting. To include these claims, it would be best to have sources from outside of the subject's realm, in order to offer a clear indication without any appearance of bias. (See WP:BLPPRIMARY.)
  4. ^ The donation of time and materials to a community in need is a laudable action. However, the job of communicating these worthwhile and important acts to the wider public is not the purpose of the article. (See WP:NOBLECAUSE.) Furthermore, the claims made as to directorships filled by the subject upon individual boards of various companies are not specifically referenced. Reference notes ought to be placed immediately at the conclusion of any sentence where a claim arises. (See WP:INTEGRITY.)
  5. ^ While the first two degrees bestowed are largely for honorary purposes, the third distinction, "most admired", is purely subjective on the part of Waterstone Human Capital, and not germane to the article. (See WP:PUFF.) Please note that this decision pertains only to items from this edit request. Items placed earlier by other editors are not under active consideration through this edit request.

Requested edits

Hello!! I would like to disclose once again that I work on the Comms team at TELUS. I went back after the feedback received here, made some changes and retrieved new sources.

Extended content

Updated Changes to Career Section

For the career section, we are looking to change it to:

Career

Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3]. He previously spent seven years as an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999. Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless business. Entwistle initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.[4] This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008, which became the health arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International.

Hyperlinked sources used:

Cited sources:

May 28, 2018- 1:36 EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 17:36, 28 May 2018 (UTC)

Updated Changes to Community Involvement

I have also made changes to the Community Involvement section, as per your feedback, that we would like added.

New section: Community involvement

In 2005, under the leadership of Entwistle, TELUS introduced the first of 18 TELUS Community Boards that support local, grassroots charities in Canada and around the world. Entwistle serves on the board of the Gairdner Foundation and is a founding member of the 30% Club Canada. His past directorships include the Board Diversity Council, George Weston Limited, the Business Council of Canada, TD Bank Financial Group and McGill University Board of Governors.

Hyperlinked sources used:

May 28, 2018- 1:42 EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 17:42, 28 May 2018 (UTC)

Updated Changes to Recognition Section

For this section, I have found updated sources in order to add the following bullets in the recognition section.

  • 2010: Named an Honorary Fellow of the Royal Conservatory of Music.
  • 2016 – Accepted an honorary doctorate from the University of Victoria
  • 2016 – Named Canada’s Most Admired CEO by Waterstone Human Capital

Hyperlinked sources used:

May 28, 2018- 1:50 EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 17:51, 28 May 2018 (UTC)

Reply 28-MAY-2018

 Unable to implement. The changes you have requested are not formatted correctly. References placed within the text ought to comport with whichever citation style is already in use in an article. You have placed external links in the text where each reference is to be used, however, external links in the article are not allowed without the concomitant use of plain <ref> tags, and the plain ref tag system of citations is not used with the Darren Entwistle article. Please format your request to include references using the citation style already in use. Assistance with this task can be found here. Regards, .spintendo  23:41, 28 May 2018 (UTC)

Career, Community Involvement, Recognition Section Update - with proper Citing

Hello again! I have implemented the proper citations to the following changes we would like to make to the career section. I have also included the Community Involvement section, with proper citing, which we would like added. As well as the new addition we would like added to the Recognition section.

Career

Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[1]. He previously spent seven years as an executive at Cable & Wireless[2] in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999. Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless business[3]. Entwistle initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history[4]. This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008[5], which became the health[6] arm[7][8] of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International [9].

Community Involvement

In 2005, under the leadership of Entwistle, TELUS introduced the first of 18 TELUS Community Boards that support local, grassroots charities[10] in Canada and around the world. Entwistle serves on the board of the Gairdner Foundation[11] and is a founding member of the 30% Club Canada[12]. His past directorships include the Board Diversity Council[13], George Weston Limited[14], the Business Council of Canada[15], TD Bank Financial Group[16] and McGill University Board of Governors.

Professional recognition

  • 2016 – Named[17] Canada’s Most Admired CEO by Waterstone Human Capital[18].


  1. ^ "Company Overview: Executive team". about.telus.com. TELUS. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  2. ^ "Cable & Wireless plc". Wikipedia. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  3. ^ Pitts, Gordon; Marlow, Iain (April 30, 2018). "Telus CEO put to a leadership test". The Globe and Mail. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  4. ^ "Telus and Clearnet Merge - The Canadian Encyclopedia". Thecanadianencyclopedia.com. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  5. ^ "TELUS announces successful acquisition of Emergis". www.newswire.ca. CISION. January 17, 2008. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  6. ^ "Home - TELUS Health". TELUS Health. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  7. ^ The Canadian Press (May 12, 2018). "Telus unit buys B.C.-based electronic medical records company". Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  8. ^ CBC News (May 6, 2009). "Telus, Microsoft hope Canada will buy into patient-centred e-health records | CBC News". CBC. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  9. ^ "Home- TELUS International". TELUS International. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  10. ^ "TELUS announces TELUS Atlantic Canada Community Board, welcomes General Rick Hillier as Chair". www.newswire.ca. CISION. August 14, 2008. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  11. ^ "About the Canada Gairdner Foundation". The Canada Gairdner Foundation. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  12. ^ McFarland, Janet (May 15, 2018). "Canada's 30% Club aims to boost proportion of women on boards of directors". The Globe and Mail. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  13. ^ "TELUS President & Chief Executive Office, Darren Entwistle Speaks Out: Innovation & Mentorship". Canadian Advanced Technology Alliance (CATAAlliance). April 24, 2013. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  14. ^ "George Weston Limited Announces Election of Directors". www.newswire.ca. CISION. May 12, 2015. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  15. ^ Canadian Council of Chief Executives: Annual Report 2014. Ottawa, Ontario: Canadian Council of Chief Executives. September 1, 2014. p. 36. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  16. ^ "Globeinvestor.com: Appointment Notice - TD Bank Financial Group: Darren Entwistle, Board of Directors". www.globeportfolio.ca. The Globe and Mail. January 15, 2002. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  17. ^ "Canada's Most Admired CEO™ Award – How it Works – Canada's Most Admired™ Awards". Waterstone Human Capital. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  18. ^ "Most Admired CEO". Canada's Most Admired CEO™. Waterstone Human Capital. Retrieved 29 May 2018.

May 29, 2018- 5:20 EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 21:21, 29 May 2018 (UTC)

Reply quote box with inserted reviewer decisions and feedback 29-MAY-2018

Below you will see where text from your request has been quoted with individual advisory messages placed underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please see the enclosed notes for additional information about each request. Also note areas where additional clarification was requested. When this is ready to be provided to the reviewer, please open a new edit request. Thank you! .spintendo  01:32, 30 May 2018 (UTC)

Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000.
 Approved.[note 1]

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He previously spent seven years as an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999.
no Not approved.[note 2]

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Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless business.
 Approved.[note 3]

___________
Entwistle initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.
no Not approved.[note 4]

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This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008, which became the health arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International.
? Clarification needed.[note 5]

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Community Involvement: In 2005, under the leadership of Entwistle, TELUS introduced the first of 18 TELUS Community Boards that support local, grassroots charities in Canada and around the world.
no Not approved.[note 6]

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Entwistle serves on the board of the Gairdner Foundation
? Clarification needed.[note 7]

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and is a founding member of the 30% Club Canada.
no Not approved.[note 8]

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His past directorships include the Board Diversity Council, George Weston Limited, the Business Council of Canada, TD Bank Financial Group and McGill University Board of Governors.
? Clarification needed.[note 9]

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2016 – Named Canada’s Most Admired CEO by Waterstone Human Capital.
Red X Already declined.[note 10]

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  1. ^ The year 2000 was appended to this statement in the article.
  2. ^ This information already exists in the article, but is unreferenced. The proposed addition here in the edit request is to add a reference, however, that reference is to Wikipedia, which is not allowed.
  3. ^ The sentence which this text replaces in the previous version of the article was insufficiently paraphrased from the source material.[1] (See WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.)
  4. ^ This text is insufficiently paraphrased from the source material.[1] (See WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.)
  5. ^ The references provided for this section are to websites related to the subject's employer. These connections to the subject could impart a sense of bias in their reporting. To include these claims, it would be best to have sources from outside of the subject's realm, in order to offer a clear indication without any appearance of bias. (See WP:BLPPRIMARY.) The only reference provided here which is outside of the subject's realm is the one provided from CBC News. However, the note for that reference is placed after the word "arm", and thus, could not be added as a coherent statement to the article.
  6. ^ The donation of time and materials to a community in need is a laudable action. However, the job of communicating these worthwhile and important acts to the wider public is not the purpose of the article. (See WP:NOBLECAUSE.)
  7. ^ Please provide dates of service for this claim.
  8. ^ This claim concerns the 30% Club, and thus, would be more appropriate for inclusion in that article.
  9. ^ These directorship positions do not have dates of service attached to them. If added, these may constitute a separate section of the article titled "Directorship" although it's not entirely clear what that term means. This term should be delineated for those readers who may be unfamiliar with it.
  10. ^ This portion of your edit request was previously declined.

References

  1. ^ a b "Copyvio Detector Report - Darren Entwistle Edit Request Proposal". tools.wmflabs.org. Retrieved 30 May 2018.

Updated Citations for Into/Career Section

Hello! Want to disclose one more time, that I am on the communications team at TELUS. I have went back to the team and have come back with updated citations and have to decided to remove the proposed Community Involvement section all together. Below are some changes we are hoping can be implemented.

The intro paragraph currently reads:

Darren Entwistle (born 1962) [1] is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company.[2] Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3] and shortly after initiated the company’s wireless and data growth strategy with the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history.[4]

We are looking to change it to:

Darren Entwistle (born 1962)[1] is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company[2].


Below is the updated Career Section with updated sources.

Career Section:

Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3]. Previously he was an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999[4][5].

Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless business[6]. Entwistle initiated the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history[7]. This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008[8], which became the health[9] arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International[10][11].


**note I cannot get the hyperlink for Cable & Wireless (http://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/Cable_%26_Wireless_plc) to embed as an internal link, it's telling me the page does not exist

References

  1. ^ Bamber, Lori. "On the Line with Darren Entwistle". BC Business. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  2. ^ "Profile: Telus Corp (T.TO)". Reuters. Retrieved 13 June 2018.
  3. ^ "Company Overview: Executive team". www.telus.com. Retrieved 29 May 2018.
  4. ^ Pitts, Gordon; Marlow, Iain (April 30, 2018). "Telus CEO put to a leadership test". The Globe and Mail. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  5. ^ Reguly, Eric (April 24, 2018). "Perfectly unhappy". The Globe and Mail. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  6. ^ Pitts, Gordon; Marlow, Iain (April 30, 2018). "Telus CEO put to a leadership test". The Globe and Mail. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  7. ^ Macklem, Katherine (December 7, 2013). "Telus and Clearnet Merge". The Canadian Encyclopedia. Maclean's. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  8. ^ "TELUS announces successful acquisition of Emergis". www.newswire.ca. CISION. January 17, 2008. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  9. ^ "Home - TELUS Health". TELUS Health. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  10. ^ "Telus, Microsoft hope Canada will buy into patient-centred e-health records | CBC News". CBC. May 6, 2009. Retrieved 12 June 2018.
  11. ^ "Telus unit buys B.C.-based electronic medical records company". The Canadian Press. May 12, 2018. Retrieved 12 June 2018.

June 13, 2018- 11:43 a.m. EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 15:43, 13 June 2018 (UTC)

Reply quote box with inserted reviewer decisions and feedback 13-JUN-2018

Below you will see where text from your request has been quoted with individual advisory messages placed underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please see the enclosed notes for additional information about each request.  spintendo  17:43, 13 June 2018 (UTC)

Darren Entwistle (born 1962)[1] is a Canadian businessman, president and chief executive officer of TELUS, a Canadian telecommunications company.
 Approved.

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Entwistle joined TELUS in 2000[3]. Previously he was an executive at Cable & Wireless in the United Kingdom, where he was named president in 1999.
 Partly approved.[note 1]

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Under Entwistle’s leadership, TELUS has evolved from a regional telephone company serving Western Canada into a national data and wireless business.
 Approved.[note 2]

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Entwistle initiated the $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, one of the largest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history[7].
no Already declined.[note 3]

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This was followed by numerous acquisitions, including the purchase of Emergis in early 2008, which became the health arm of TELUS, as well as the establishment of TELUS International.
? Clarification needed.[note 4]

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  1. ^ The claim regarding being named president in 1999 was omitted.
  2. ^ This sentence was updated to reflect the preferred wording (except the word "leadership" was omitted).
  3. ^ This text has already been reviewed and found to be insufficiently paraphrased from the source material.[1] (See WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.)
  4. ^ The requested references have been provided, but this problematic sentence needs to be re-worded. First, the claim of "numerous" acquisitions is not precise. Second, it is not clear what TELUS International is, as it is not mentioned in the provided references. Third, becoming the "health arm" is not clear what this means. I would suggest that instead of re-requesting this statement, that it be completely reworded so that it does not contain 4 separate claims within one sentence. Suggestion: "With the acquisition of Emergis in 2008, TELUS moved towards making digital patient information, such as a patient's X-rays and lab findings, more accessible to them and their providers. This focus was embedded in TELUS's Health Solutions division."[2] The problem with this sentence, is that once it is reworded into something more coherently understandable (and lengthier) it quickly becomes evident that this is information which belongs in the TELUS article, rather than this one. The need to place longer descriptions of information into certain articles over others — which may, in turn, receive shorter descriptions of the exact same information — may be due to the inherent feeling that abbreviated information in general is more appropriate for articles where relevancy is less evident. To use a metaphor, in order to fit something into a location where there is no extra space one must be prepared to use a compacting force in order to make it fit. This may account for the "compacted nature" of the problematic sentence mentioned here.

References

  1. ^ "Copyvio Detector Report - Darren Entwistle Edit Request Proposal". tools.wmflabs.org. Retrieved 30 May 2018.
  2. ^ "Telus, Microsoft hope Canada will buy into patient-centred e-health records". CBC News. 6 May 2009.

Career Section Update

Hello! Disclosing once more that I work on the communications team at TELUS. Went back and tweaked the remaining two parts that we are looking to have approved for the Career section.

The $6.6 billion purchase of Clearnet in 2000, was one of the biggest acquisitions in Canadian telecommunications history[1] and contributed to the national expansion. With the acquisition of Emergis in 2008, TELUS moved towards making digital patient information more accessible to them and their providers. This focus was embedded in TELUS’ health solutions division [2] [3].

  1. ^ "Telus bids $6.6 billion for Clearnet in wireless mega-deal | CBC News". CBC. August 21, 2000. Retrieved 20 June 2018.
  2. ^ "Telus, Microsoft hope Canada will buy into patient-centred e-health records | CBC News". CBC. May 6, 2009. Retrieved 20 June 2018.
  3. ^ "Telus unit buys B.C.-based electronic medical records company". The Canadian Press. May 12, 2018. Retrieved 20 June 2018.

June 20, 2018 - 4:16 p.m. EST --Saara rahikka (talk) 20:17, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

 Done  spintendo  22:53, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Career Section Update

Hello!

Wanted to disclose one more time that I am on the communications team at TELUS. Thanks so much for implementing/ approving the changes. In regards to the career section, is it possible to remove the following from the section? We are looking to remove this portion and keep the remaining updated part.

"Entwistle has spent 30 years in the telecommunications industry.[10] Entwistle is on a number of boards, including the Canadian Council of Chief Executives, George Weston Limited and the Canadian Board Diversity Council. He has also sat on the boards of TD Bank Financial Group, the Vancouver Symphony Orchestra, and the Leading Edge Endowment Fund. Darren also served as Chair of the Royal Conservatory of Music’s Capital Campaign and was a Director for the 2010 Winter Olympic Games bid committee.[11]"

3:02 p.m. EST

--Saara rahikka (talk) 19:02, 21 June 2018 (UTC)

 Done Because the remaining sections were shorter, I altered the headings to more closely describe what was in them. Under professional recognition I changed this to Community recognition.[a] This was done simply because I thought the headings looked better having them more concise in their descriptions, but if the COI editor would like them back under the previous three headings, please let me know and I will change them back. Thank you!  spintendo  21:21, 21 June 2018 (UTC)

Notes

  1. ^ The term professional has the tone of items given or received strictly in the office space of the business world, and many of these items are not from that area. In some circles it might be considered rude to label certain items as professional. No one calls an MD a professional medical doctorate - that would be superfluous - because it is simply a medical doctorate the word professional is unnecessary. I believe anyone attempting to add the label professional to a recognition given in the name of the British Sovereign would run the risk of an accusation of trying to be facetious about it, from those who take all things Royal very seriously. Also, the first few items in this list refer to themselves as 'community'-bestowed (community in the sense of not just a business community, but the larger societal community). But as I've said, if you'd like it changed back, let me know.

Looking to Remove Template Messages

Hello! Wanted to disclose once again that I work on the Communications team at TELUS. Thanks so much for implementing all the changese. I was just wondering if it's possible to remove the template messages at the top of the Wiki page. The template messages read:


This article has multiple issues. Please help improve it or discuss these issues on the talk page. (Learn how and when to remove these template messages)

A major contributor to this article appears to have a close connection with its subject. (October 2017)

This biography of a living person relies too much on references to primary sources. (October 2017)

Thanks!

June 26, 2018- 1:15 p.m. EST

--Saara rahikka (talk) 17:15, 26 June 2018 (UTC)

It would be best to first speak with the editor who added those templates, in this case Widefox, to determine from them whether they believe that the templates may be removed.  spintendo  21:29, 26 June 2018 (UTC)
Firstly, have editors here read and followed the instructions at WP:COI and WP:DISCLOSE? i.e. Saara rahikka have you? Do you have any connection with the other accounts/editors listed at the top of this page that didn't disclose? Also, if you are paid to edit, you must additionally abide by WP:PAID as a legal requirement to edit here. Are you paid, and have you disclosed per that? As for the article, it reads promotional, and basics like birthdate aren't sourced, but I see much COI activity and overuse of primary sources and lacking third party independent sources. So no, I see a typical COI ask to remove maintenance templates that are justified with no plan to address those issues. I see you are a WP:SPA editor too, you may be best served to gain experience editing other articles rather than this one you are conflicted over. Widefox; talk 21:47, 26 June 2018 (UTC)
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