Talk:Cyprus in the Eurovision Song Contest 2010/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
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I will start this review tomorrow! --K. Peake 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Shouldn't Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis be italicised in the infobox like it is elsewhere?
- "in the selection of Jon Lilygreen and" → "in the selection of Lilygreen and"
- Change on February 7 2010 to merely in February 2010 since the full date is not notable here for a selection contest
- "Cyprus placed tenth" → "Cyprus placed 10th" per MOS:NUM
- "and placed twenty-first out" → "and placed 21st out"
Background
[edit]- "twenty-seven times since" → "27 times since" per MOS:NUM
- "which it achieved three times:" → "achieving this three times:"
- Remove commas around Cyprus Broadcasting Corporation (CyBC)
- "at the 2010 Eurovision Song Contest" → "at the Eurovision Song Contest 2010" with the wikilink
- Not all of the various methods are sourced
- Remove "compete at Eurovision" from the end of the sentence because this is implied
Before Eurovision
[edit]Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis
[edit]- None of the info appears to be sourced by [4], unless there is an archive mentioning this?
- Remove comma after received submissions
- The 1996, 2002 and 2005 participations are not sourced, nor is Mike Connaris' involvement
- "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat as well as in Greece on ET1 and online" → "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat and in Greece on ERT1 as well as online" but the website part is not sourced
- "The song received the" → "The entry received the"
- Remove overly obvious wikilink on Wales, though this fact itself is a nice addition!
Promotion
[edit]- "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders made" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders made"
- "On 12 March, Jon Lilygreen and" → "On 12 March 2010, Lilygreen and" per this being a new sub-section
- Remove overly obvious wikilink on Netherlands
- Pipe Marga Bult to Marcha
At Eurovision
[edit]- Wikilink Jon Lilygreen on the img text
- Remove wikilink on RIK 1, also not all of those broadcasters are sourced
Performances
[edit]- "Jon Lilygreen during a rehearsal" → "Lilygreen during a rehearsal" on the img text
- "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May," → "Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May 2010,"
- "The Cypriot performance featured Jon Lilygreen" → "The Cypriot performance featured Lilygreen"
- "It was later revealed that Cyprus placed tenth" → "The country placed 10th" per MOS:NUM, also this is from the same source as the previous sentence
- "the ten qualifying countries." → "the 10 qualifying countries."
- "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders once again" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders once again"
- "on 28 and 29 May before" → "on 28 and 29 May 2010 before"
- "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"
- "Cyprus finished in twenty-first place" → "Cyprus finished in 21st place"
Voting
[edit]- "the country they represent." → "the country each represented."
- "Cyprus scored 57 points." → "the nation scored 57 points."
- "who announced the Cypriot votes" → "who announced their votes"
- 37 is the ref that backs up the voting info, so should be invoked after that as well as the last sentence of the para
- "and awarded by Cyprus in" → "and awarded by the nation in"
Points awarded to Cyprus
[edit]- Good
Points awarded by Cyprus
[edit]- Good
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks fantastic at 11.5%!!!
- Cite Wiwibloggs as publisher instead on ref 1
- Cite ESCToday as publisher instead on refs 4, 6, 7, 8, 9, 11, 16, 17, 21, 23 and 34
- WP:OVERLINK of European Broadcasting Union on refs 12, 18, 19, 20, 22, 24, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 35, 36, 37, 38 and 39
- WP:OVERLINK of Cyprus Broadcasting Corporation on ref 25
- Cite EuroVisionary as publisher instead on ref 26
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until all of the issues are fixed; nice work on this though! --K. Peake 16:16, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Thanks for another detailed review! I've made the changes you've requested, though could you please clarify this comment: "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"? Grk1011 (talk) 14:25, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- Grk1011 When I click on the source, the only thing identical about the two separate occasions is the position they performed from. --K. Peake 15:01, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: I didn't see that in the ref either, so I just reworded it. Let me know if any other issues remain! Grk1011 (talk) 18:58, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, nice job on this! --K. Peake 07:29, 21 June 2022 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: I didn't see that in the ref either, so I just reworded it. Let me know if any other issues remain! Grk1011 (talk) 18:58, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- Grk1011 When I click on the source, the only thing identical about the two separate occasions is the position they performed from. --K. Peake 15:01, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Thanks for another detailed review! I've made the changes you've requested, though could you please clarify this comment: "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"? Grk1011 (talk) 14:25, 20 June 2022 (UTC)