Talk:BlueforSudan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Frzzl (talk · contribs) 14:21, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

Review

Hello there, I'm Frzzl, and I'm going to review your article.  Frzzl  talk; contribs  14:21, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   This article unfortunately has a lot of MOS problems, some examples below:

• far too many short paragraphs, which make it harder to read
• prose isn't that well written
• large sections need wikilinking

1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

   Sources on the whole seem reliable, but I need to say that the refs really aren't well formatted - no author, no tagging for the multiple YT videos used as sources. Also a fair few sentences were directly lifted from the university website.

2. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   This is the big one - this article (understandably as you seem to quite connected to Sudan) has major POV issues, and large parts of it honestly need to be rewritten. See examples below.

   while obviously this is a terrible incident, the article has a REALLY strong pro-protest tone and POV, which is why it can't be a GA

• some of the high-profile individuals who have been instrumental in bringing attention to the crisis
• bogus accounts exploited the #BlueForSudan movement by making fake claims about sending aid to Sudan in exchange for clicks
• However, the protesters persisted, and the sit-in at the military headquarters in Khartoum continued to grow in size and significance, eventually becoming the heart of the pro-democracy movement in Sudan. The Sudanese government responded to the protests with more violence and repression

1. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   couldn't find any wars, reverts - seems stable

2. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Images are OK, the shade of blue probably needs a source tho

3. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   quickfail due to the multiple issues, (especially the POV) which fail WP:GAC

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