Talk:Anushtegin Gharchai/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 11:24, 26 July 2021 (UTC)

Happy to pick this one up.

Review

• He was the first member of his family to rule Khwarazm does not appear to be mentioned in the main text.

1 Name

• His name – the full name is needed here. Is a separate section really needed for this sentence?

Fixed. Imo yes, it's not that shorter compared to other name sections. --HistoryofIran (talk) 13:52, 30 July 2021 (UTC)

2 Biography

• The link to Turkic in Turkic slave-soldiers needs to be moved up to where it first occurs in the text.
• The references following frontier place named Sakalkand need to be reversed so that they are in numerical order.
• was still commonly – still sounds redundant imo.
• Link steppes.
• Consider linking assimilated (Cultural assimilation).
• I would expand (1097–1231) to ‘which existed from 1097 to 1231’ or something similar.

3 Notes

• Introduce Z. V. Togan (I would call him Zeki Velidi Togan, link him, and describe him as a Bashkir historian).

5 Sources

• (Bos1977) I would use https://archive.org/details/laterghaznavidss0000bosw/page/n5/mode/2up.
• (Bos1968) I would use http://www-cambridge-org.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/core/books/cambridge-history-of-iran/political-and-dynastic-history-of-the-iranian-world-ad-10001217/024AA8933D346C06170E0D72EA6D71A4 (subscription required).

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 7 August to allow time for the relatively small number of issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 12:11, 30 July 2021 (UTC)

Passing now. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:06, 30 July 2021 (UTC)