Talk:Alyssa Healy

Quick Lead Comments

• "... she is the daughter of Greg Healy, who played one first-class match while her uncle, Ian Healy, was Australia's Test wicket-keeper and was the world record holder for the most Test dismissals." Should a comma be added before while? Or even after, perhaps.
• "Healy first came to prominence in late 2006 when she became the first girl to play among boys in the private schools' competition in New South Wales." Should this be "amongst"? p
• How come you don't use a hypen for "late 2006"? Did it come up in the last FAC?
• "Coleman left New South Wales at the start of the 2009–10 season and Healy took on the glovework on a full-time basis for her state." Repitition.
• "In that season ..." Doesn't read too well.
• "She played in the first five one-day internationals (ODIs) ..." I thought we used capitals and got rid of the hypen unless we were saying "one-day match".

—Aaroncrick (talk) 02:30, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

No hyphen says Brian. Otherwise doen YellowMonkey (vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll) 03:36, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Alyssa Healy/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Courcelles (talk) 08:33, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello; and welcome to the first GA review on a female cricketer- if it's not the first, it's the first I've ever done. I'm not a big fan of the checklist, and I like to read an article in two different sessions before posting a ton of comments, so all I'll post tonight will be anything that just jumps out at me... which may be nothing at all, since I've not read the article yet. Courcelles (talk) 08:35, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

• All images have ALT text, no disambig links, both images licences are good. (And that's as far am I'm getting tonight. I'm falling asleep in my chair.) Courcelles (talk) 08:39, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

• Is her family relationship really important enough to mention in the lead?

• "and took one catch." Is there any wikilink available to explain what a "catch" is in cricket?

• Same issue for "scoring only 24 runs in her first five innings."

• "school CAS cricket competition"? What does that acronym mean?

• "In reply, Healy made a duck..." Even as an someone who has watched cricket, this makes no sense to me. This are really my biggest concern- the article is written for those who already are well familiar with cricket

I've read this article twice, and let me say this is a very nice article. With about fifteen minutes of work, I'll be proud to pass this one. Courcelles (talk) 09:58, 14 March 2010 (UTC)

I've done all these except the lead. It's pretty rare for parent/child to both play for the country. Playing professionally is not a big deal, but for the country, only around 15 are in teh squad at any one time. YellowMonkey (vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll) 05:30, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

Got it. One more issue; I've recently learned GA's are supposed to have the Template:Persondata in them. Courcelles (talk) 10:17, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

After another read through, this one passes. Very nice article, and for the record, I agree with the choice of pictures. Courcelles (talk) 20:39, 16 March 2010 (UTC)

Family

The article says that Alyssa's father Greg Healy has played one first-class match. However, CricketArchive's page on him shows he hasn't played first-class cricket, but has two matches for Northern Suburbs. She also has another uncle, Ken Healy, who has played one first-class (and one List A) match. —Raven42 (talk) 06:28, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks, fixed YellowMonkey (vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll) 06:45, 19 March 2010 (UTC)