Talk:Allessandro Liberati

Allessandro Liberati was a Music good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.

Article milestones
Date	Process	Result
January 13, 2013	Good article nominee	Not listed

To any editors on 10/8/12

I uploaded this article last night. Please don't fret on the missing wikilinks because I'll be adding lots of those when I get the chance today, so please don't feel you have to just because there are none.

---Saw1998 (talk) 12:50, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Allessandro Liberati/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 12:56, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
When was File:Liberati Portrait.png shot? Likewise File:Liberati in millitary.jpeg.
The portrait was shot for a local newspaper (His American hometown Detriot) in 1923, and the military uniform was found appearing on the Library of Congress

The first in Warsaw Union the second loc.gov ---Saw1998 (talk) 14:05, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
That should be noted in the picture summaries
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I made some copyedits.

The major issue with this article are the POV wordings that are teeming in the Style section. An example is "In 1895, he became known for establishing now a well-known tradition of circus bands when be began traveling with the superstars of the circus world, the Ringling Brothers, for whom he opened performances of their popular circus gaiety.[12]" - the underlined is not defined exactly (and is confusing), and the italicized wordings are too expressive for an encyclopedia.
What is his nationality? The first sentence should include his date of birth and date of death, per WP:OPENPARA
That he was a virtuoso should not be merely noted in the lead
Only the infobox informs us when he was born or died. So, there should be more information regarding that, such as the cause of his death.
You use the +ing form too often. For example, instead of "he was also known for being a respectable bandleader for" you could just write "he was a respectable bandleader". The prose will become more engaging.
"He married his wife, Elsie, in 1881. They lived in New York and had one daughter." is unreferenced. What was his daughter's name? Perhaps add more information to his family life.--Tomcat (7) 20:34, 25 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Most of the concerns remain unaddressed, so failing this. Wizardman 23:58, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]