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GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 22:53, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Thanks for stepping up! I hope I haven't caused any grief or bad blood, so to speak, because of our previous interaction. MSG17 (talk) 23:04, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• A reference is needed to verify that the film is 108 minutes.
  • Done and fixed the runtime

You can't cite Netflix. You need a reliable source.

Rechecked the sources in the article... found one that mentioned the runtime (now stated at the old amount, strange), changed to that

• In the first paragraph, add a comma after Sonam Kapoor Ahuja.
  • Done
• Link film-within-a-film.
  • Done
• The claim that "Filming took place in December that year" seems misleading considering the note in #Production. I would reword it.
  • Reworded

Plot and cast

• Since it's just trivial, remove the note after "documentary" in the first sentence.
  • Yeah, I don't think its ideal either. Done
• Currently, the plot section is 754 words. Per WP:FILMPLOT, try to get it down to 700.
  • Managed to get it down to exactly 700
• Remove the comma after "uninterested".'
  • Done
• Remove the comma after "CCTV footage".
  • Done

• The sentence "then would take a gun out from his bag and force Kapoor to kill either of themselves" is kinda confusing. Try rewording it.
  • Reworded
• Add the cast listing template to #Cast.
  • Never knew about this template... done

Production

• Are three references really needed after "his spokesperson"?
  • Eliminated one frivolous reference, now it's just the initial report and a later refutation
• Is the quote after "early 2020, with Kapoor stating" necessary? Can it be changed to prose?
  • I would think that, for something like this, it would be best to hear it from the horse's mouth. (It helps that this quote was featured on DYK, so I am rather partial to keeping it.)

Thanks for the reason. Sounds good.

• "under-the-radar" → "under the radar"
  • Done
• Link Twitter.
  • Done
• In the note after "IAF officer", change "To be more specific" to "In the film".
  • Done

Soundtrack

• "Weiting" → "Writing"
  • Done
• NDTV and Bollywood Hungama should not be in italics.
  • Done

Reception and analysis

• Link Bollywood Hungama.
  • Its linked in the soundtrack section, so its not relinked to avoid repetition (same thing done with NDTV now).
• NDTV and Bollywood Hungama should not be in italics.
  • Done
• Move the first reference after "messaging" to after "Indian cinema',"
  • Done
• "..." → "[...]"
  • Done
• Can "inside information on" be changed to just "inside information" or is it supposed to be part of the rest of the sentence it's in?
  • Its supposed to be part of the rest of the sentence (inside information on the main actors and Bollywood in general).

So can "information on and the reputations" be changed to "information on the reputations"?

I don't see why not. Done

• Link the first use of Film Companion, not the second.
  • According to MOS:DUPLINK, "Citations stand alone in their usage, so there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article".

The first paragraph in this section has two uses of Film Companion. I was just saying to link the first one rather than the second one.

Oh...; sorry, I misread that. Fixed

• "intentionally[...]the" → "intentionally [...] the"
  • Fixed
• "intentionally[...]" → "intentionally [...]"
  • Done

References

• Archive all archivable sources (I recommend using this).
  • I already ran through it with the bot beforehand... looks like it missed a few (and I added one), so I reran it. I'll manually added an archive for one that it missed later, as it is taking a while to generate in the Internet Archive.
• Try linking each website used in each reference.
  • Done
• In the only reference citing it (currently #10), link Khaleej Times.
• Change the multiple links to Free Press Journal to The Free Press Journal.
• "Mashable India" → "Mashable India" ([[Mashable|Mashable India]])
• "Bollywood Hungama]." → "Bollywood Hungama"
  • All done

Overview

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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