Talk:34th Battalion (New Zealand)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, will comment within a couple of days. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:41, 6 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox; all good
Section 1.1;
- When was 8th Infantry Brigade Group raised?
  - Have added.
- several years? from when and which "several years" is the context about?
  - Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- defence of the colony; which colony?
  - Clarified that we are referring to Fiji. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  - I find this entire sentence confusing, please rephrase
    - How does it read now with the clarification? Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- contingent of reinforcement personnel -> contingent of reinforcements
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- date of arrival at Suva
  - Have added. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- F. W. Voelcker; isn't the full name available?
  - Not at this stage but there is one more source I will check. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    - Found it and added. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- minimal training -> minimal military training
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- before shipping to Fiji -> before being shipped to Fiji
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- military basics -> basics of warfare and tactics
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Towards the end of 1941, ~~and~~ as the threat of hostilities
  - Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- By now it was up to full strength with the recent arrival of reinforcements in Fiji; did the reinforcements arrive from Fiji, so where was the battalion? or it means, that with the arrival of reinforcements, in Fiji, the battalion was full
  - Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Link Major General
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- war~~fare~~ in the Pacific
  - Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Link Guadalcanal
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- full name of R. J. Eyre?
  - Have added. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

More later ... Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:14, 7 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback thus far, Krishna, I have attended to or made comments in relation to these. Thanks. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Section 1.2;
- advised the New Zealand Government that it was ready for combat duties; "advised" is a bit awkward, may be "informed" etc.
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- 6.25 am -> 6:25 am, per MOS:TIME
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Reidy's full name?
  - Have added an initial, no luck with finding his given name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Section 1.3; all good
Section 2; all good
Section 3; I prefer mentioning the full names
- Have done, except for Reidy as I wasn't able to find out his first name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
All images are appropriately licensed
17.4% confidence, violation unlikely.

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:24, 10 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: thanks for the comments, have responded above. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:22, 17 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]