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Please review the draft and see whether it contains any information that should be added to this article. Robert McClenon (talk) 19:56, 3 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:2018 Ad Diriyah ePrix/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 19:00, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 19:00, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

Lead

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Driver changes

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  • "Felipe Massa made his series début with Venturi, and he was partnered two-time Macau Grand Prix winner" > "partnered with" or "he partnered".

Preparations for the race

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  • "public ceremony at the Diriyah Governorate on 25 September", could do with the year being included here as the last months mentioned before that are October and December.
  • "overseen by Samer Issa-El-Khour", without a link this name really means nothing. Has he got a job title to include or is he particularly notable in his field?
  • "along with few 90-degree hand corners that is typical of Formula E street circuits", this sentence is a little confusing. Should hand be in there? Should is be replaced with are?

Concerns about human rights

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Shakedown

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  • I think I'd drop the "however" from the start of the second paragraph and simply start with "Concerns were raised..." as it doesn't seem to be linked to the end of the previous paragraph.

Free practice

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  • "A 35-minute practice period was held and it was followed shortly after by a two-group qualifying session", could probably drop the it from this sentence.

Qualifying

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Race

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Copyvio tool comes back a little high but there's a few quotes that take up most of it and a reference spot check seems fine. A few minor issues to deal with. Placed on hold until they are addressed. Kosack (talk) 20:47, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]