Talk:1993 Finchley Road bombings/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:54, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "a travel agents" isn't just "a travel agent"?
- "environment 1 mile north of the initial bombings in" comma after environment and bombings.
- "1 mile" convert
- "exploded four more bombs in north London, two exploded " exploded quickly repeated, perhaps detonated for the first?
- "4 injuries" four.
- "and was the first" doesn't really "run on". I would full stop after Howard and then "They were the first...
- "Following the bombing, the" bombings.
- "early 1993, the Northern Ireland peace process had just" overlinked.
- "the IRA ceasefire in 1994" include IRA in the pipelink.
- "in 1994.[3] In 1994" repetetive.
- "on the 27 " no need for the.
- "in Camden Town.[6] 18 people were" merge, which helpfully avoids starting sentence with a numeral.
- "At 00:20 UTC, a telephone" add date in here now we're talking about the actual subject of the article.
- "Society.[10][9] The" ref order.
- "On the 2 October" no need for the.
- "bomb could've been" avoid contractions.
- File:1993 Finchley Road bombings artist's impression of blast subject.png please fill in the "n.a."s, these are not suitable justifications for non-free image usage.
That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:50, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man
Done. Feel free to highlight any other concerns. — Berrely • Talk∕Contribs 17:50, 3 September 2021 (UTC)