Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Friedrich Geißhardt

Friedrich Geißhardt

Please review the article. I am looking for additional references that could give more insight into his personal life and improvements on wording. Thanks MisterBee1966 (talk) 18:45, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ranger Steve

Just a few early thoughts MisterBee:

Translation - I don't know if there's a policy on this, its just off the top of my head, but a large number of readers probably wouldn't know the German 'ß' character. There might be a translation convert thingy or something like that available.

good point MisterBee1966 (talk) 16:08, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Given the importance of the award, it might be worth saying something like ... was awarded the Knights Cross of the Iron Cross, Germany's highest award for bravery on the battlefield, in 1941... in the lead.

done MisterBee1966 (talk) 16:08, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are several stubby sentences that could be joined to make better prose - for example: Geißhardt is credited with 102 victories in 642 combat missions, including 37 close air support missions. He achieved 63 of his victories over the Eastern front. In his total are at least seventeen Spitfires. becomes: In 642 combat missions, which included 37 close air support missions, Geißhardt was credited with 102 aerial victories. Sixty three of those were achieved on the Eastern Front and the rest included at least seventeen Supermarine Spitfires.

Hope it helps! Ranger Steve (talk) 00:10, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

One more - the type of planes he flew isn't mentioned until he lands one and subsequently dies. I'm sure this would get picked up as the article expands anyway, but thought I'd mention it. Also, it seems a bit reversed to mention that he was flying in a schwarm, but the plane he was flying only gets mentioned as he lands it! Might look better if it was structured along the lines of ... was flying an FW190 in Major Prillers Schwarm when.... if you see what I mean. Cheers, Ranger Steve (talk) 10:27, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Auntieruth55

Beginning of a neat article. It's interesting that this man's humility was not equal to some of the other Aces you've written about. ;) Just a couple of things. You're missing some English translations in parens, and in some cases, they aren't consistent--for example, the award is in English and the German in parens. Also, contractions (hadn't) probably should be spelled out. Have you looked at books about the bomber wing defense that wounded him? They might have something on that flight. Auntieruth55 (talk) 20:18, 12 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert

Looks pretty good to me, I only have a couple of comments:

the sources listed in the Bibliography have slightly inconsistent format (some have the date in brackets next to author's name, but the last two have dates closer to the end). This could be fixed by formatting all of them with the {{cite book}} template;
there is one disambig link according to the Featured article tools (Siege of Malta);
if possible it would be good to get a little bit more information on the subject's early life (e.g. parents names, father's occupation, any siblings, where he went to school). Of course, this may not be available, but just a suggestion. If you can get that info, I suggest breaking it into a separate section called "Early life";

Anyway, that's it from me. Cheers. Keep up the good work! — AustralianRupert (talk) 00:31, 19 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]