Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Keith Johnson (cricket administrator)
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- Promoted --Eurocopter (talk) 11:54, 15 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Manager of the WW2 Australian Army cricket team. Was a flight lieutenant in the RAAF. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 08:11, 16 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments - Just a few points I noticed:
- I'm not entirely convinced Johnson comes under the Milhist scope, but I'll wait and see what others think.
- Well my rationale is that he was the manager of an crmy cricket team that was officially desiganated as a military unit. YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) 04:34, 6 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The lead could probably do with an expansion to two paragraphs.
- An endash is required in the lead.
- Is there any more information on Johnson pre-Second World War?
- Still looking YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 00:58, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The official commissioned history of the NSWCA and Cricket Australia don't have anymore, unfortunately. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 03:01, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Still looking YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 00:58, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- From a quick internet search, evidence suggests Johnson also served in the First World War, enlisting in 1916. Why is this not mentioned in the article?
- Can you give me the URLs. I just tried googling but couldn't find anything. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 00:58, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- It helps when you already know the right places to look. ;-) The Australian War Memorial's research a person is one place to look, and Johnson's entry in The AIF Project is here. The National Archives might provide his service record, too, so it might be worth searching their site's records. Hope this helps. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 02:32, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Can you give me the URLs. I just tried googling but couldn't find anything. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 00:58, 17 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The presentation of dates is inconsistant in the article, utilising both US and British formats. Please choose one and stick to it, preferrably the latter as it is on an Australian.
Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:19, 16 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support - meets the criteria fully. One question: what is with the opening image? "Permission to publish this photograph on Wikipedia was given per fax dated 6 August 2005 from Michael Talbot, State Library of South Australia to en:User:Moondyne). Acknowledgement is hereby given: "Photograph courtesy of the State Library of South Australia, PRG 682/18/48,1948,p.52". Permission is contingent on use of low resolution image only. Permission granted for this particular use only." Does the last sentence violate WP:IUP? —Ed 17 (Talk / Contribs) 02:44, 30 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- No, it is {{PD-Australia}} anyway YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) 04:34, 6 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment Three websites reported as supicious, please check and advise. Four disambig links reported, these need to be checked and if at all possible fixed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TomStar81 (talk • contribs)
- It's just an unavoidable redirect. YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) 04:49, 14 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
MOS review - I've not read the article in full, but wanted to point out some minor MOS issues:
- Why are monetary values like "1,935 pounds" given, using 'pounds' instead of a currency symbol? £ is less ambiguous than pound.
- Ellipses should have leading and ending spaces (the leading one should be a non-breaking space).
- Please fix the all-caps in the Notes.
- Shouldn't "World War II" be "Second World War", given the context?
- The lengthy direct quotation from the testimony could use some work. Bulleting does not make it easier to read, and there is no clearly associated citation for the quote.
Maralia (talk) 16:39, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed all to WWI WWII per Wiki conventions and consistency. Rst are fixed YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) 04:49, 14 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Looks good, as usual. I would suggest using an infobox, perhaps one of the generic bio infoboxes, but otherwise no major concerns. Cla68 (talk) 07:50, 15 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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