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Yu Kanda

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have plans to nominate it to FA in the future. I know it requires a copy-edit so I requested one some days ago. Still, I'm not sure what it lacks to become a FA like Allen Walker so I would like suggestions, critcism, etc.

Thanks, Tintor2 (talk) 02:29, 16 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Also pinging @DragonZero: and @ProtoDrake:.Tintor2 (talk) 01:47, 17 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]; Forgot @Jaguar:
Comments from 1989

Looks fine, should be better after someone copyedits it.
Ref 12 is not archived.

MCMLXXXIX 14:10, 16 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Archived.Tintor2 (talk) 01:47, 17 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Aoba47

Complete the "Media data and Non-free use rationale" table for the infobox image. Same goes for the screenshot in the "Appearances" section. Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Link D-Gray-man in its first instance in the body of the article. Same goes for Allen Walker. Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Could you further specify this sentence "Additionally, she found Kanda difficult to illustrate due to his beauty."? How does the character's beauty make him difficult to illustrate? Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Kanda is bishonen (an androgynous male character who is even mistaken for a woman in one chapter for the manga). However, Hoshino never refers to him as a bishonen but "sex appeal". How do you think I should rephrase it.Tintor2 (talk) 14:14, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I think it is fine as it currently stands. I was more so asking a clarification question to see if you could possibly expand on this information. I understand if you cannot; thank you for clarifying this.

Is the screenshot really necessary? I am not sure what it adds to the article (especially since it is a non-free image). Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll remove it.Tintor2 (talk) 14:14, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I do not find the image of the cosplayer to be entirely necessary for the article as it does not add much to the article and it clips through the subsections awkwardly. Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll remove it.Tintor2 (talk) 14:14, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Avoid shouting in the reference titles. For instance, in reference 24, anime review should not be in all caps. Aoba47 (talk) 20:34, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll remove it. Basically have no clue of what free image should I add. Maybe Willingham since he is mentioned by critics?Tintor2 (talk) 14:14, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

A free image of Willingham could be help. It is really up to you though on what you think would work best with this. Aoba47 (talk) 14:28, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I will try to address your comments once I get my cpu fixed.Tintor2 (talk) 19:08, 19 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

No worries; I will look through the article again in the next couple of days to make more in-depth remarks. My above comments are just some minor things that I noticed while briefly reading through it. Hope it helps, and I look forward to seeing this at FAC. Aoba47 (talk) 13:54, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Tried doing all the problems you found Aoba47. Still lost at what I should add for the "beauty" as I commented above though.Tintor2 (talk) 14:14, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing my comments. I believe that this article is strong and I look forward to seeing it put up for FAC sometime in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 14:28, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47, added an image of Willingham and removed the box from reception. Do you think it's better?Tintor2 (talk) 14:25, 31 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me. Aoba47 (talk) 14:47, 31 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]