Wikipedia:Peer review/Ximena Sariñana/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it needs to be expanded and worked on a lot.
Thanks, – Obento Musubi (C • G • S) 05:09, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
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No pictures? Have you checked Commons or Flickr (with the appropriate licences)?
Done.
"a famous" - that's POV, stick to the facts.
- Fixed. A note: Even if she's gaining popularity and becoming famous, I agree. It's not very neutral to call someone "famous". And pardon me for marking your stuff up. I just need to keep track of what I've done already.
- Place citations per WP:CITE i.e. immediately after punctuation where possible.
- I would expand the lead a little to describe what she's achieved and how. Then move the family stuff down as a first section along the lines of a Personal life section (or something similar).
- The Daniela Luján you link to as a character is a real person - is that link correct?
- I believe so. I think Daniela Luján is the actress who played Luz Clarita in the telenovela.
- You don't need to link English language on each occasion.
"thirty-eighth " 38th.
- Done.
- "movie befor she acted in her first telenovela" maybe reorganise the biography in that case. And "befor" needs an e.
- Okay, partially done. Someone corrected the "e" already.
- There is a [citation needed] template which needs sorting out.
- "She is currently dating Omar Rodriguez Lopez from The Mars Volta." - needs referencing and a timeframe i.e. As of September 2008...
Why is the album table coloured?
- Done.
- No need to wikilink dates any more - this has been deprecated.
- The "Notes" section should be called "References" and each reference should be filled in correctly with, where available, title, url, author, date, accessdate and publisher.