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Merrion v. Jicarilla Apache Tribe

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to improve the article and submit it for FA.

Thanks, GregJackP Boomer! 03:57, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments by Cirt

(Having stumbled here from my Peer Review.)

1. Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
2. I noticed I remarked on the talk page on the size of the lede back in 2011. The intro still is of meager size, needs to be expanded to adequately function as a standalone summary of the entire article's contents, per WP:LEAD.
3. Images:
   • File:Seal of the United States Supreme Court.svg = good.
   • File:Apachean present.png = should be standardized using commons:Template:Information.
   • File:Thurgood-marshall-2.jpg = should have "author" field filled in, also seems to be some error in the template.
   • File:US Supreme Court Justice John Paul Stevens - 1976 official portrait.jpg = should be standardized with commons:Template:Information.
4. Redlinks: Washington v. Confederated Tribes of Colville Indian Reservation = not necessary of course, but would be nice to see this article created at least as a nice little informative sourced piece for the readers.
5. Organization: Good structure throughout. Suggest creating final section, Commentary, for brief discussion of analysis about the case from secondary sources, law journals, legal scholars and academics, etc.
6. Portals: Consider using {{Portal bar}} to add relevant portals below the External links section.
7. See also: Think about adding a See also section with 3-5 links or so to other interesting relevant articles.
8. Further reading: Consider adding a Further reading section with recommendations to the reader for books/articles for more info on related topics.
9. Image ALT text: Image ALT text checks out okay.
10. Footer template: Is there a relevant footer template that could be used to link together related caselaw, something like {{US1stAmendment}}, and if not, could one be created maybe?
11. Referencing: Good job with sourcing so far, but it leaves the impression that maybe there are more sources out there covering the topic, as mentioned above perhaps secondary source commentary and analysis in law journals.
12. Primary sources: It appears that seven (7) of the twenty (20) sources are primary sources. Perhaps with expansion from secondary sources, this could be mitigated, even if it's just adding secondary source commentary and analysis, as suggested, above.
13. Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!

Overall: High quality article with good potential and promise. Keep up the good work, — Cirt (talk) 02:18, 10 November 2013 (UTC)

Addressing:

1. I noticed I remarked on the talk page on the size of the lede back in 2011. The intro still is of meager size, needs to be expanded to adequately function as a standalone summary of the entire article's contents, per WP:LEAD.
2. Images:
   • File:Seal of the United States Supreme Court.svg = good.
   • File:Apachean present.png = should be standardized using commons:Template:Information.

 Done GregJackP Boomer! 07:07, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

1. • File:Thurgood-marshall-2.jpg = should have "author" field filled in, also seems to be some error in the template.
   • File:US Supreme Court Justice John Paul Stevens - 1976 official portrait.jpg = should be standardized with commons:Template:Information.
2. Redlinks: Washington v. Confederated Tribes of Colville Indian Reservation = not necessary of course, but would be nice to see this article created at least as a nice little informative sourced piece for the readers.
3. Organization: Good structure throughout. Suggest creating final section, Commentary, for brief discussion of analysis about the case from secondary sources, law journals, legal scholars and academics, etc.
4. Portals: Consider using {{Portal bar}} to add relevant portals below the External links section.

 Done GregJackP Boomer! 07:07, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

1. See also: Think about adding a See also section with 3-5 links or so to other interesting relevant articles.
2. Further reading: Consider adding a Further reading section with recommendations to the reader for books/articles for more info on related topics.
3. Image ALT text: Image ALT text checks out okay.

OK. GregJackP Boomer! 07:07, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

1. Footer template: Is there a relevant footer template that could be used to link together related caselaw, something like {{US1stAmendment}}, and if not, could one be created maybe?

 Done GregJackP Boomer! 07:07, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

1. Referencing: Good job with sourcing so far, but it leaves the impression that maybe there are more sources out there covering the topic, as mentioned above perhaps secondary source commentary and analysis in law journals.
2. Primary sources: It appears that seven (7) of the twenty (20) sources are primary sources. Perhaps with expansion from secondary sources, this could be mitigated, even if it's just adding secondary source commentary and analysis, as suggested, above.