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2023 Union Square riot[edit]

2023 Union Square riot (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

As of 28 June 2024, 18:43 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.
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Nominator(s): 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 14:55, 23 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the 2023 Union Square riot. This was a giveaway of gaming-related items gone wrong, meant to be hosted by Kai Cenat. Any comments are welcome and appreciated. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 14:55, 23 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

Nikkimaria, do you have any further comments? 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 22:12, 2 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

At this point just that alt text shouldn't duplicate the caption - see WP:ALT. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:49, 2 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done. — 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 00:48, 3 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Draken Bowser[edit]

In the interest of brevity I'd like to change "while not having a permit for the gathering." into "without a permit for the gathering." or even better "without a permit." I would also like for the lead to briefly summarize the consequences, including injuries, property damage and arrests. Regards. Draken Bowser (talk) 11:46, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

voorts (comments & source review)[edit]

  • I've made several edits throughout for concision and grammar/style. Please feel free to discuss them here.
  • At this time, Cenat traveled to Atlanta, Georgia At what time?

This one's been stale because the Wayback Machine and other Internet Archive services are currently down. Will get back to it when I can. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:09, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 17:13, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • According to Jonah Bromwich of the New York Times, this is not Cenat's first giveaway: in July 2023, he surprised a Massachusetts woman whom he used to visit with, by giving her $20,000, saying she was "a second mother to him", and that she deserved it. The woman, Cathy Parker, was "reluctant to accept the money." Recommend removing this sentence as not relevant to the Union Square riot.

Done. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:27, 26 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • On August 25, Night, a talent management firm based in Austin, Texas, announced the acquisition of LFM Management, another talent management company based in New York, placing Night as talent management for Cenat and other AMP members. Recommend removing this sentence as not relevant as well.

Done. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:27, 26 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • Are there any more reactions that can be added to the Analysis section? Anything more recent than August 2023?

I was unable to find any. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:27, 26 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That's all for now. voorts (talk/contributions) 23:31, 25 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review also completed. Currently, some cites are missing wikilinks for work titles (e.g., ref 22 not linking to BBC News) and there's inconsistency between using the publisher vs. work parameter in some {{cite web}} references. I recommend using work for all of them. Ref 40 has www.cbsnews.com for the work parameter. Please go through all of the cites again, let me know when you're done, and I'll take a look. voorts (talk/contributions) 23:43, 25 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
In progress. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:09, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Voorts: Done. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 16:23, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
A few more notes:
  • There's no consensus as to Fox News' reliability, so I wouldn't consider it to be a high quality source per FAC criteria. Can you replace ref 10 with something else?
  • The ref for note a (ref 22) is from 2020. It's also unrelated to the actual event. Is there a ref that says Cenat was wrong about the tear gas? Otherwise, I would remove this note.
  • Ref 29: WL CBS New York to WCBS-TV.
  • Ref 36: WL CBS News.
  • The analysis section begins "The incident generated discourse about the outsized influence of internet personalities", but only cites 4 sources. Can you find more analyses to cite there?
voorts (talk/contributions) 16:41, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Voorts: Done. 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 17:13, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
From a quick search, I've found more articles that can be added to the analysis section:
I think you can find more from additional searches. voorts (talk/contributions) 17:28, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Voorts, I can't access the first source. Can you give an identifier (i.e. ISBN, DOI, etc.)? — 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 17:32, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It's this article: [4]. voorts (talk/contributions) 17:33, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Voorts, Done. (I was unable to find any other sources analyzing the event) — 🌙Eclipse (talk) (contribs) 13:46, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support. voorts (talk/contributions) 17:52, 30 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dugan Murphy[edit]

I'll review the article in a bit. Dugan Murphy (talk) 22:55, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done. lunaeclipse (talk) 18:46, 27 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • I recommend Wikilinking live streaming from the lead and first instance in the body.
  • announced that they – "that" is unnecessary.

Done. lunaeclipse (talk) 14:12, 27 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • Maybe I'm just middle aged, but despite the fact that "subathon" is linked to a Wiktionary entry, I think it is worth giving the term a little more context for the reader to understand it without having to click on the link. Perhaps replace "subathon" with "continuous livestream subathon to attract new subscribers".
  • As of August 2023, Cenat has a cumulative – "had" seems more appropriate here, especially to preserve the article's relevance as it ages.
  • Wikilink PlayStation 5?

Done. lunaeclipse (talk) 14:12, 27 June 2024 (UTC) I'll add more later. Dugan Murphy (talk) 00:13, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • The serial comma is inconsistently used. I see two missed opportunities to use it before it is used in webcams, keyboards, and microphones. Make that consistent.
  • How are you using the term mission in the Background section?
  • Is there an appropriate Wikilink for "level four mobilization"?
  • Wikilink 14th Street–Union Square station?
  • were forced to close early – forced by the NYPD or the businesses themselves decided to close?
  • I see dollar amounts listed 5 times, but only once is the USD currency specified. I think that given the topic, that specification isn't necessary.
  • Were Cenat's gift cards worth $100 each or total?
  • A witness reported not being able to breathe. – because of tear gas?
  • The way the timeline is written out in the Union Square riot section, I get the impression that Cenat was in a police car around or after 5:30, but later it says he was released by police at 5:00. How is that?
  • Maddrey stated, "When I – MOS:CONFORM recommends replacing that comma with a colon.
  • New York City mayor Eric Adams – I believe "mayor" should be capitalized when written out that way.
  • New York Daily News – why isn't the whole title italicized?
  • In his first public appearance after the riot, Cenat held up a New York Daily News issue and apologized in a livestream on August 9, while announcing that he would take a break from livestreaming. This sentence tripped me up. Suggestion: "On August 9, Cenat made his first public appearance after the riot in a livestream, holding up a New York Daily News issue, apologizing, and announcing that he would take a break from livestreaming." (Note my use of the serial comma, which may or may not match the rest of your article, depending on how you want to handle that consistency issue.)
  • smashing a man in a red sweatshirt's head – This sentence tripped me up a bit. If you remove "in a red sweatshirt", it would read better. That detail doesn't seem necessary anyway.
  • Is there anything else in the sources about the Civilian Complaint Review Board action? That one sentence seems lonely and also that seems an important item to be left without a conclusion.
  • The Union Square riot section seems to indicate that Cenat was released from police custody on August 4, but the Aftermath section says he was released August 5. Which is it?
  • What is the Union Square Partnership?
  • The combined amount of $57,099 paid for damage and staff hours needed in the riot's aftermath. That's not a sentence.
  • Denzel Dennis and Muktar Din, two other people connected to the incident, paid $1,049.50 to the organization. They each paid that amount, right? The way its written, the sentence tells me they each paid $524.75.
  • "children cannot be raised by social media," – The comma should be outside the quotation mark, per MOS:INOROUT
  • Mark Johnson opined on the role of social media (such as the interactivity of Twitch) on the relationships between streamers and their fans. I think "role" should be "affect", if I'm reading that right.
  • organize with authorities the next time he organizes – I would prefer to see one less "organize(s) in that sentence.
  • I don't think quoting "was going to be that big." adds value. I think this would be better summarized in your own words. If you do keep it, move the period.
  • Instead of Sources conflict on if Cenat was arrested on the spot., how about "Sources conflict on whether or not Cenat was arrested on the spot."?
  • Subway entrance pic caption: I don't think you need to repeat what's said in the body. I recommend reducing the caption to simply "14th Street–Union Square station entrance".
  • I don't think it is necessary to include the citation in the infobox for the start and end times of the riot since that information is supported by citations in the body.
  • Infobox: remove second Wikilink to Union Square and Kai Cenat (and the 3rd and 4th Kai links).
  • Infobox: I can't find any of the law enforcement figures but Maddrey in the body. If they are included in the infobox, they need to be mentioned in the body and supported there by a citation to a reliable source.
  • Infobox: (Kai Cenat, charges later dropped) – that comma should be a semicolon, I think.
  • Are Denzel Dennis and Duke Dennis the same person?

Lead

  • I think the first sentence could do a better job of speaking to a global audience by immediately placing the event in the US. I think this could probably be achieved by describing Cenat as American and maybe changing the "Union Square, Manhattan" to "New York City's Union Square" or something like that.
  • I think the phrase "purported giveaway" can give the false impression that he allegedly gave stuff away, but that he may not have. I recommend rewriting to indicate that people convened on the promise of a giveaway.
  • obliged to close early – similar to my question above: ordered to close by NYPD or decided on their own to close?
  • The third instance of "riot" is Wikilinked; it should be the first, if you're going to Wikilink it at all. If you're going to Wikilink it in the lead, I think the first instance in the body should be Wikilinked as well. Having said all that, I think the term is broadly understood enough to not need a Wikilink.
  • There's no need to include "(NYPD)" in the lead since the term only comes up once in that section.
  • "Unlawful assembly" is Wikilinked in the lead, so I think it should be Wikilinked in the body as well.
  • The lead claims Cenat paid over $55k in restitution but the body says exactly $55k. Which is it?
  • "Restitution" is Wikilinked from the body, so I think it should be Wikilinked from the lead as well.
  • Maybe this is just a style choice, but I recommend changing would also apologize to "also apologized".
  • I think it would be appropriate to include a little bit from the Background section in the lead.

I think that's everything. All in all, this article looks like it may well be comprehensive, though this is the first I've heard of the event, so I'm not familiar with any details or analysis that isn't included. I have not looked at the sources, trusting that they have already been vetted above. Aside from the comments above, I think the prose is well written and uses WP:NPOV. Earwig's Copyvio Detector says plagiarism is unlikely. Dugan Murphy (talk) 03:27, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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