User talk:Lunahom/sandbox

Peer Review

Hey Luna,

I really enjoyed reading your draft! Your writing is easy to follow. As someone who is not so knowledgable on ecotourism, I found the information was conveyed in a way that was easy to understand. Also, I think the article is structured well. Here are some editing notes:

It might be helpful to the reader to define ecotourism in the first sentence of your lead. Also, I would go more in depth on the environmental, economic, and social impacts that you mentioned in the regulation section. You may want to consider adding more references as well.

I think your topic is really interesting. I'm writing my article on the wildlife trafficking network in southern Africa, so I can definitely draw from your research.

ConserveMoore (talk) 00:53, 28 March 2019 (UTC) Erin[reply]

thanks so much Erin! I will definitely flesh out the factors you mentioned, and add the definition at the lead. -- luna

Peer Review

The topic of eco-tourism is very interesting since tourism greatly affects how humans interact with their ecosystem. Eco-tourism can benefit the ecosystem by reducing the effects of mass tourism that often times are not regulated. The information in your article is relevant to eco-tourism. I’m writing about illegal fishing and I talked about how tourism affects wildlife.

Some improvements for the article:

The lead section should contain more information about what eco-tourism is so that the reader knows what the article will cover in later sections.
Some punctuation marks are missing, such as commas and quotation marks. I added the closing quotation mark on “key elements". I am not sure if it should go there.
Another way to improve the article is to review the reference section since I was not able to access the links to find out where the information is coming from.Nulartro7 (talk) 01:50, 28 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for review and your comments!! I will be sure to add the definition in the lead and review the references! -- luna