User:Eveattewell/Feminist views on transgender topics/Ashthygesen Peer Review
Hello, Eveattewell. I like the topic you have chosen to do your wiki article on. You might want to include a link to the wiki page that explains what an "open letter" is since I did not know what it meant and had to look it up. I am unclear on when your lead ends and it does not clearly state what the following sections will include. The sentence "In late-February 2020, a further group of feminists and feminist organizations released an open letter stating that they opposed the importing of "transphobic debates" into France and that creating divisions between cis and trans women "only serve the patriarchy."" sounds odd to me and might need to be re-written. In the sentence that you mention "Bloomsbury Handbook of 21st-Century Feminist Theory" you should have a citation for this source. If "Bloomsbury Handbook of 21st-Century Feminist Theory" is a book and you are having trouble citing it then go to this link for help. I found the template to cite books very helpful in my own wiki article. The sentence "Some early modern texts believe that this insistence on two genders only plays a role in France's hesitance to accept ambiguous or non-conforming genders." would be stronger is there was a citation to support it. I could not access any of your sources therefore they might not be cited properly and you should look into this. Your wiki article is to short and would benefit from more details. Overall, the main issues with your article is the length, the lack of clarity in your lead, and citation issues.
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