User:Bmharden2/The Vanishing Half/Jashongriffin123 Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)

Link to draft you're reviewing
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

Brina, you've improved the synopsis a lot. I suggest a few cosmetic changes to the first paragraph. (I'll send these two you via a Microsoft word doc for sake of time). The last two paragraphs of the synopsis were spot on!

What do you mean by this statement? Can you rephrase for clarity?

Bennett's novel explores the many ways humans perform to control society’s view of them

A few other changes:

Performance and Acting

Bennett's novel blurs the line between performance and authenticity.. Performance, particularly in regards to identity, is a central theme of the novel. Some of the characters, like Kennedy and Barry perform temporarily, mostly on stage. Kennedy perform______ while Barry performs in drag (highlight and link to another wikipedia article) on the weekends. Stella, on the other hand, must uphold a constant performance throughout her daily life in order to control society's view of her. Passing is an enduring struggle for Stella throughout the novel. ^[1] In order for her to maintain her facade, she can never be fully honest with herself or others. Stella's performance becomes so intense that she ends up perpetuating racism even more than her white counterparts. (I think you're going to need a citation for this previous sentence).

Passing

Bennett's novel also delves into the complexities of racial passing (link to wikipedia page). Unlike its previous African American literary predecessor, Nella Larsen's Passing (link), where the protagonist's passing ended in tragic consequences, in Bennet's novel, she explores an alternate possibility. Stella does not regret her decision to pass and despite what it's cost her, chooses it again at the end of the novel.^[2] Bennett's novel conveys the many reasons why people chose to pass in a Jim Crow society. Many people simply wanted to escape the painful realities of racial degradation and prejudices. Stella's decision to pass causes emotional turmoil for her, but it also allows her to escape her hometown where she is virtually stagnant and unable to pursue her dreams.(a citation is needed).

Let me know if you have some questions. I know because it was a bit rushed it might not be as clear, but I hope it's helpful. Overall, you've done quite a bit to improve the page.

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