Template:Did you know nominations/Nav Nirman

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The result was: rejected by BlueMoonset (talk) 05:21, 10 December 2012 (UTC)

Nav Nirman

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... that students protest against 20% hike in hostel food bill sparked Nav Nirman movement which inspired Jayaprakash Narayan to launch Bihar Movement which resulted in Emergency imposed by Indira Gandhi?

Reviewed: Lord Airey's Battery,Mokshada Ekadashi
Comment: Expanded 5x in last 5 days.

Created/expanded by Nizil Shah (talk), Rama's Arrow (talk). Nominated by Nizil Shah (talk) at 06:46, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Just a quick one. Hook should be under 200 characters per Wikipedia:Did you know#hookformat. Zia Khan 13:14, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Yes, It contains 210 words including Wikimarkups. If Wikimarkups are excluded than it is under 200 words. I can make it shorter if required. --Nizil (talk) 17:41, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

short ALT 2:*... that students protest against 20% hike in hostel food bill sparked Nav Nirman Movement which inspired Jayaprakash Narayan to launch Bihar Movement, led to Emergency imposed by Indira Gandhi?

Is ALT ok? or original one? --Nizil (talk) 17:41, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

short ALT 3:*... that students protest against 20% hike in hostel food bill sparked Nav Nirman Movement which inspired Bihar Movement, resulted in Emergency imposed by Indira Gandhi?

---Nizil (talk) 18:21, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Expanded significantly, QPQ done, referenced; would go for ALT 3. Zia Khan 22:23, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Article contains significant duplication of this source. Compare for example "This was the first and last successful agitation after Independence of India that ousted an elected government" with "This was the first and last successful agitation after Independence that ousted an elected government" or "The movement participants' value system was no different from the politicians they were combating and the agitation had no effect on arresting corruption. In hindsight, Nav Nirman Movement provided ground for reactionary forces to flourish" with "But their value system was no different from the politicians they were combating and the agitation had no effect on arresting corruption... In hindsight, Nav Nirman provided ground for reactionary forces to flourish." Nikkimaria (talk) 04:07, 30 November 2012 (UTC)

What should I do? I will compare with other sources and fix them. Can I again submit for DYK? Nizil (talk) 08:31, 30 November 2012 (UTC)

All paraphrases are removed with new sentences. --Nizil (talk) 10:13, 30 November 2012 (UTC)

I'm afraid not all of the paraphrases have been fixed: compare for example "The urban middle class was unhappy because of the high price of essential commodities while the countryside was demanding minimum wages and food security" with "The urban middle class was unhappy because of the high price of essential commodities while the countryside was demanding minimum wages and food security" - identical between the article and source. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:30, 30 November 2012 (UTC)
Looking a bit closer: you've reproduced part of the copied text across several articles - though irrelevant to this DYK, you'll need to clean those up too, as that could get you in a lot of trouble. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:37, 30 November 2012 (UTC)