Talk:Wilhelm Beck
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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 21:25, 17 January 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this. If you have any interest in returning the favor I have a list of unreviewed nominations that can be seen here. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 21:25, 17 January 2024 (UTC)
Lead/infobox
- "him most notably presenting the original draft for the constitution of Liechtenstein" → wording on this bit is just a little awkward, maybe split into two sentences?
Early life
- "where received a diploma" → missing word
- "member of the historical association of Liechtenstein" → If the "Historical Association of Liechtenstein" is a proper organization, then "historical association" should be capitalized
Law career
- "In 1912 he worked with Swiss lawyer and councillor Emil Grünenfelder" → not required, but you can add "the" before "Swiss" to avoid a WP:FALSETITLE
- "who supported Beck throughout" → I don't think his name is required here; since you use "who" which clearly refers to Grünenfelder, I think you can get away with "who supported him throughout"
- "law firm in Vaduz" → Vaduz is already linked in "Early life" so you can remove the link here
Political career
- See also link is a redirect; make "putsch" lowercase to fix this
- "Beck criticized the existing" → "He criticized the existing"
- "In 1914 Beck formed" → "In 1914 he formed"
- "the Governor of Liechtenstein" → lowercase "governor"
- "deeply dissatisfied by Imhof's handling of the economy and who wanted a Liechtensteiner head of state" → sentence gets a little confusing, recommend splitting up somewhere
- "in the Landtag of Liechtenstein on 7 November" → recommend a quick note mentioning that this is the legislative body, as that is not clear to readers unfamiliar with Liechtenstein
- "power of Governor to a Provisional Executive Committee" → lowercase "governor" and I believe you can do the same for the other capitalized words
- "led by Ritter and Johann II accepted Imhof's resignation" → reads as a run-on; recommend ending the sentence after "Ritter" and starting the next "Johann II"
- "Beck was a co-founder of the Christian-Social People's Party in February 1918" → "Beck cofounded the Christian-Social People's Party in February 1918"
- "elected into the Landtag of Liechtenstein" → delink as the link is given in the previous paragraph; also don't think "of Liechtenstein" is necessary here since the full term has already been introduced and there is no risk of ambiguity
- "When Johann II appointed" → remove duplicate link here since Johann II is already linked in para 1 of previous section
- Remove link to "Governor of Liechtenstein" since that's already linked too; also remove caps from "governor"
- Remove link to Christian-Social People's Party since that's already linked
- "limited the power of the Prince of Liechtenstein for" → remove caps from "prince"
- "With assistance from Josef Peer" → Peer is linked in the previous paragraph
- "After the Christian-Social People's Party won" → Remove link to Christian-Social People's Party since that's already linked
- "serve as the President of the Landtag of Liechtenstein" → remove caps from "president"
- "involving the National Bank of Liechtenstein" → remove link since this is linked in the previous paragraph
- "Johann II forced his government" → remove link
- "In 1932 an indictment was conducted..." → This is a very long run-on sentence which needs to be split
- "though he appealed this ruling, he did not live to see it's outcome" → "...see its outcome", the contraction is incorrect here
- "After the 1928 Liechtenstein general election Beck" → remove link; also think about removing "Liechtenstein" here since it's quite clear the country being discussed and because the election has already been mentioned
- "over the leadership of the Christian-Social People's Party and was again elected to the Landtag of Liechtenstein" → remove both duplicate links
- "the Christian-Social People's Party and" → same thing here
- "Beck died on 20 January 1936 in Walenstadt, aged 50 years old" → this seems more appropriate in "Personal life"; also in my opinion "years old" is unnecessary here since "aged" is included
Personal life
- "a teacher from Wittenbach" → since this is set off as an appositive, a comma is needed after "Wittenbach"
- "served in the Landtag of Liechtenstein" → IMO only "Landtag" is needed here since the reader knows by now that Liechtenstein is being discussed and its mention here is only informal
Literature
- If this is a list of the works Beck wrote, I would make that apparent
References
- FN 9 and FN 21 are identical and can be combined
- Recommend archiving sources; I can do that if you'd like
- I also ran a script to fix issues with dashes
That's all I've got - a bit of work to do but only on relatively minor things, especially sentence structure and duplicate links (have a quick read over WP:DUPLINK for those guidelines). Placing on hold. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 23:10, 17 January 2024 (UTC)
- @PCN02WPS Thanks for the review. I have made a series of edits to address what you have mentioned. Please advise. TheBritinator (talk) 13:20, 18 January 2024 (UTC)
- Looking great. Just a few more things that need either a fix or a comment:
- "though he appealed this ruling, he did not live to see it's outcome" - replace "it's" with "its" and change comma after "in 1935" to semicolon
- "aged 50 years old" - nix "years old"
- PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:00, 18 January 2024 (UTC)
- Looking great. Just a few more things that need either a fix or a comment:
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