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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 02:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Lead

  • The transition from the first to second sentence is rather abrupt. Something like "The storm began as..." would be helpful.
  • The first paragraph could probably be chopped down; after all, it's a paragraph that (mostly) summarizes a two-paragraph section, which isn't much of a summary.
  • Total damage along the path of the cyclone was estimated at $400 million. Is this anywhere in the body of the article?

Meteorological history

  • a general northeast course. — Should this be "northeastern course"?
  • However, since the boundary had not yet moved through Olga's circulation, it persisted as a tropical cyclone. — Is "it" supposed to refer to Olga, or to the boundary? Grammatically, it refers to the boundary.
  • over the southeastern Ontario province — Might want to rephrase. From an American context, saying "over the southeastern Michigan state" would seem pretty odd.

Preparations and impact

  • Flash flood watches encompassed nearly 8 million residents — Not sure "encompassed" is the right word? "were issued to nearly 8 million residents"? "Nearly 8 million residents were in areas with flash flood watches"?

Louisiana

  • The energy companies Entergy and Cleco reported damage to 150 and 35 power poles, respectively. An additional 260 power poles were impaired in New Orleans and Hammond. — So did Entergy and Cleco not operate in Hammond, or are the 150/35 numbers restricted to certain locations?
  • The Jazz Half marathon was also delayed. — For how long?
  • High winds temporarily damaged the perimeter fencing — Does "temporarily" mean that it was repaired? If so, I don't think you need that word.

Mississippi

  • Prentiss, Corinth — Not sure why these are linked later rather than here.
  • "Corinth" is now a red link in the phrase "were recorded across Prentiss, Corinth, and Alcorn counties." It looks like that's because it's not a county at all, but rather a city in Alcorn county. --Usernameunique (talk) 20:46, 13 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • worked to restore power to the WTVA and WLOV-TV transmitters. — Were those stations taken off the air by the storm?

Tennessee'

  • F3 tornado — Anything this can be linked to?

Elsewhere

  • Never knew a "flash drought" was a thing. Anything to link to?

Aftermath

  • Any other images that could be used here?
  • waster systems — waste systems? Water systems?
  • on the right-of-way — Does this mean the right side of the road?
  • The city of Okolona planned to ask that agency for funds as well. — Did it end up doing so?
  • penned U.S. President Donald Trump for — I think you mean "penned a request to U.S. President Donald Trump".
  • the Red Cross set up shelter to distribute — "set up a shelter"?

References

  • Do you happen to know which tool automatically adds archived URLs to each reference? I know there is one, but can't remember its name. That might be useful here, where some of the URLs are likely to go dead with time.

Overall