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Good articleStephen Vogt has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
May 8, 2020Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on June 3, 2020.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Oakland Athletics fans coined the chant "I believe in Stephen Vogt!", inspired by a similar U.S. men's national soccer team chant?

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 10:44, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

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  • It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
  • It contains copyright infringements -
  • It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
  • It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -
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Prose

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Lede

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  • Could we expand on what the IPA means?
  • Stephen Guy Vogt (/ˈvoʊt/; born November 1, 1984) is an American professional baseball catcher for the Arizona Diamondbacks of Major League Baseball (MLB). - well, he hasn't always played for them...
  • baseball catcher - WP:SEAOFBLUE
  • MLB all-star - should link the whole thing, or it's an WP:EASTEREGG.
  • Repetition of draft in " He was drafted by Tampa Bay in the 12th round of the 2007 Major League Baseball draft."
  • Vogt spent six years in minor leagues in Tampa Bay, and was named the franchise's Minor League Player of the Year - is "minor league" a proper noun or not? Might need to expand on what minor league it is.
    • I added a wikilink to the first reference of "minor leagues", which I think should be sufficient for the reader without having to expand on what it is, which I think would add a lot of unnecessary wording to the lead. As for "Minor League Player of the Year", my understanding is that is the official title of the distinction, so it is a proper noun in this case and should be capitalized. — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • 0 for 32 hitless streak, - Jargon.
  • He started his major league career with an 0 for 32 hitless streak, which set a Tampa Bay record and lasted into his debut with Oakland in 2013 - I'm still not sure what this means.
  • bases-loaded walk-off single. - Jargon. Might be ok in prose, but is a bit much in the lede.
  • breakout season - is this a technical term? Sounds promotional.
  • By the time Vogt left Oakland in 2017, - casual tone. Try "Vogt left Oakand in 2017 with a batting..."
  • 49 home runs and 198 RBIs - more jargon.
    • Expanded RBI to "runs batted in" and wikilinked it so the reader can find more on what it is. Though I think RBI is a common enough baseball statistic that its fair to use in the lead of an article about a baseball player. — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Individual records, such as "best since this time" isn't really lede worthy, this lede should be 3 paragraphs with the content.
    • Is this your personal view or is there some sort of guideline or policy stating this? It certainly strikes me as lede worthy... — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      • A lede is about the subject, why its important, how it effects the world, etc. Its fine in the text to comment on how good a particular season is, it's not really an overview of the player as a whole though. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:30, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
        • Fair enough. Would you mind identifying for me which specific sentences/phrases you'd like me to cut? I don't want to accidentally remove something you wanted kept, and/or keeping something you wanted removed. — Hunter Kahn 20:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • shoulder injury that threatened to end his career, - conjecture.
  • Vogt has been a favorite among fans and teammates alike throughout his career, and Oakland fans coined for him the popular chant "I believe in Stephen Vogt!" - puff.
    • I removed the first part of this sentence, but not the second, as the chant is extremely well-known in relation to Vogt; it's kind of one of the most famous things about him. lol — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Catfish Hunter Award for three consecutive years and the Dave Stewart Community Service Award - what are these awards?
  • Is there a reason sometimes you refer to the team by it's expression "athletics, the Giants" et al. and sometimes as the state - San Francisco, Tampa Bay...
  • Two-time NAIA All-American selection and set multiple school records. - what does this mean?

Infobox -

NOTE: I had to run before I could get to the general comments, but I will work on those later today. — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

General

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  • copyvio check is unconvincing :).
  • Whilst three references on their own isn't a WP:REFBOMB, you don't need three references for so many statements! Pick the best one, and put it in. Just because extra material exists, we don't have to use it
    • I have combed through the article and removed all instances in which three consecutive citation tags were used. This resulted in the numbering of some of the citation tags being changed, but I went through and fixed the order wherever I found it. — Hunter Kahn 20:00, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Quite a few duplicate links
    • How do I address this? Is it the Duplication Detector link above? I've never used it before and I was a bit confused because it was asking for two URLs, so I wasn't sure what to use in it? — Hunter Kahn 20:08, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • What's with the level 4 subsection for minor leagues? It's lower than the one below it.
    • It seems someone else changed around the subsections from how I originally had them. In my view, the way I originally had them was better, so I've changed them back, but please do let me know what you think. — Hunter Kahn 20:09, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • 14 subsections is a bit ridiculous for one section. Consider changing the subsections of career into the clubs he played with, and then subsection that with year.
  • If that is done, use {{|TOC|2}}
  • I'm not sure I know enough about copyright to be 100%, but I don't see how the infobox image meets our CC-BY-SA standards from Flikr. [1]
  • Arizona Diamondbacks (2020) needs expansion.. It also can't be simply 2020, as it's noted he signed in 2019.
  • the: I can't begin to thank all of my teammates, coaches, front office, clubhouse staff, trainers and FANS enough for everything this past season. It was a season my family and I will always remember. Words will never express the gratitude we feel for the opporutnity to be a Giant. There are many things we will miss in SF and we will treasure every memory. Thank you to all the people who had a hand in that. quote needs to go, it's selfserving and isn't particularly helpful. Nothing that couldn't be written about.

GA Review

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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  • Automated note - If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definitely not mandatory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
    • Thanks for agreeing to take this one on, Lee Vilenski! I look forward to addressing whatever comments you have... — Hunter Kahn 16:42, 26 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      • No problem! Hunter Kahn. I have a bit of a thing for getting lede's to be good (as that's the most important part of the article), thus why there are so many issues raised. It's clearly a well sourced article that could potentially do with a bit of a cull of a few references, but for the most part, the rest of the article is perfectly well in-depth. I've got a couple more comments that I will jot down, and then put it on hold. I'll drop you 7 days to get back to me, and then I'll do a second sweep. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:02, 28 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Works for me. Passing Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:22, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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