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Plot summary

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The plot could do with a copyedit, since there some original research and clarity issues.

  • It is acceptable to relay the events of the plot in synopsis, but not to interpret. For instance:
  1. Some years later, for some unknown and seemingly odd reason, Ah-gui is going to cosmetology school – in what way is it odd? You should relay the events that establish this perception, rather than state your reading of it.
  2. Soon both discover that no matter how carefully you plan and dream, if you are careless, life can be unbearably painful. We see through Ah-gui’s eyes things begin to come apart: the betrayal, the argument, the crying. – This sounds more a like a film review than a simple summary of the plot.
  • There is also too much reliance on direct quotes from the film. Apart from a potential copyvio issue, it brings too much detail into the summary. All the best plot summaries on film articles tend to omit dialogue and just focus on providing a broad overview.
  • There are also some clarity issues:
  1. Ah-gui, obviously not happy with Ah-hsian's new interest, does her rebellion thing – What does "rebellion thing" actually mean in this context? It is very vague.
  2. Ah-hsian finds his feelings of being different make sense after a brief encounter with a Japanese tourist traveling alone. – What is meant by "encounter"? Is he just attracted to the tourist? Do they go on a date? Do they have anal intercourse? Again it isn't very direct so isn't particularly helpful to a reader.

Betty Logan (talk) 07:35, 18 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your input. Yeah, I really went in to review mode, because did not want to ruin climax.  And as far as the encounter, it is left pretty much to your imagination.  This is definitely a PG film. :- ) DCS 21:30, 18 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All the English Love of Siam articles are gone.  And, I don't do Thai.  :- ) DCS 22:16, 28 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Found Love of Siam quotes. This article may require copy editing for grammar, style, cohesion, tone, or spelling. I never claim to be Hemmingway... Help?  :- ) DCS 12:19, 22 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]