Talk:Somewhere I Have Never Traveled
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Plot summary
[edit]The plot could do with a copyedit, since there some original research and clarity issues.
- It is acceptable to relay the events of the plot in synopsis, but not to interpret. For instance:
- Some years later, for some unknown and seemingly odd reason, Ah-gui is going to cosmetology school – in what way is it odd? You should relay the events that establish this perception, rather than state your reading of it.
- Soon both discover that no matter how carefully you plan and dream, if you are careless, life can be unbearably painful. We see through Ah-gui’s eyes things begin to come apart: the betrayal, the argument, the crying. – This sounds more a like a film review than a simple summary of the plot.
- There is also too much reliance on direct quotes from the film. Apart from a potential copyvio issue, it brings too much detail into the summary. All the best plot summaries on film articles tend to omit dialogue and just focus on providing a broad overview.
- There are also some clarity issues:
- Ah-gui, obviously not happy with Ah-hsian's new interest, does her rebellion thing – What does "rebellion thing" actually mean in this context? It is very vague.
- Ah-hsian finds his feelings of being different make sense after a brief encounter with a Japanese tourist traveling alone. – What is meant by "encounter"? Is he just attracted to the tourist? Do they go on a date? Do they have anal intercourse? Again it isn't very direct so isn't particularly helpful to a reader.
Betty Logan (talk) 07:35, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
Thanks for your input. Yeah, I really went in to review mode, because did not want to ruin climax. And as far as the encounter, it is left pretty much to your imagination. This is definitely a PG film. :- ) DCS 21:30, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
All the English Love of Siam articles are gone. And, I don't do Thai. :- ) DCS 22:16, 28 February 2012 (UTC)
Found Love of Siam quotes. This article may require copy editing for grammar, style, cohesion, tone, or spelling. I never claim to be Hemmingway... Help? :- ) DCS 12:19, 22 April 2012 (UTC)