Talk:Roy Riegels/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 01:20, 30 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article tomorrow, on a quick glance I do see some major reliable sourcing concerns that needs to be fixed however. Secret ^account 01:20, 30 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Heh tomorrow turned into a month, thank you overheated, crap laptop computer. Well I apologize for my mistake in delaying the review, lets get started....

Nothing on his early life at all or his career before the infamous fumble? Surprising there isn't more out there considering the notoriety of the play.

So far I have not been able to find any information regarding his early life or football career before the wrong way run. However, I will keep looking.

University of California was a major school in the west, add some background information as well.

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Quotes fail WP:MOS#QUOTES, either incorporate to the article or remove completely.

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What makes this a high-quality reliable source?

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This is a dead link, replace or remove.

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What makes this a high-quality reliable source, being from a fan site?

I found two additional references which could be used in place of the above reference: reference 1 and reference2. However, the article will need to be revised to include content from these two references.

Price credits Riegels as the smartest player he ever coached. Misplaced sentence that is better moved somewhere and a new section about Riegels Cal career in general.

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Apparently most of the content in Aftermath and Personal life is conflicting, I recommend moving content from "Aftermath" that doesn't involve his football career or the wrong way play (e.g the coaching, World War II, and chemical company) and see if you could merge it to personal life.

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That's just to start, it has too many issues (primarily comprehensiveness and MOS) to qualify for a quick fail, but I'll give you a few days to fix some of the problems and what you can come up with and I'll help you from there as this falls under my area of expertise. Thanks Secret ^account 05:07, 1 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing this article. No reason to apologize for the delay. I am incredibly busy myself but I will respond to the feedback listed above as time allows. Thanks again - Mistercontributer (talk) 01:25, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The rewrite is better than I thought, I'm sure there is information about Riegels early life somewhere, but that is going to be a pain searching I'm sure. Good job. Secret ^account 04:11, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I will keep looking for info about his early life. - Mistercontributer (talk) 17:54, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]